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Haunting
by Jennifer White

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Comment by k mixon on 06/19/08
Great ghost story. That is one little girl,that I would be so ever
thankful. I would enjoy my new life,but,I would go back to the
house,and do special favors for her.

Comment by Karen Michelle on 02/08/04
Well, how many times have I dreamed of what it's like to be a woman?  And how many times have I wished I could just wake up and everything was changed, so that nobody else knew that I used to be a man, so that I could just move on with my life as a female?  Plenty of times, that's how many!  This was a nice story taking me where I've wanted to go so many times.... permanantly.  I'm not sure I would have made the main character a lesbian, but then again, its your story and your perrogitive to do that, just as its my choice to do whatever I want with my characters when I've written some of the stories I've posted here.

It's a nice short story.  Maybe next time you could go into a more detailed exploration, allowing another character to really explore what it means to be a female, including a long term relationship with a man.  Not just limited to her making love with him, but living with him, taking care of him, the ups and downs with him, having his children, and maybe her life as a mother.  That is of course if your orientation is that way.
 
I can't speak for all transgendered females, but the stories that really transport me to being a woman and allow me to experience in my mind the full set of emotions give me a lot of pleasure.

Hope to see more from you.  Thanks for the opportunity to explore my own desires through this story.  Good luck in your next effort.


Comment by Paula on 02/07/04
Like it when my guess of what will happen is right. Good story and it was a nice ending.

Comment by Julius on 02/07/04
Good descriptions and details, but the plot was a bit predictable. Give us a twist or something next time to surprise us. You're a good writer, I know you can do it.



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