I love you!
Another amazing story. You're great!
A lot of kisses!
Silvia.

yet agin a great story from you. It does make a change to read storys like these that have you gripped from the fist to the last word. You have great tallant and i can't wait to read more of your long storys as i find the there better then most short storys of most other apart from another writer with her story about tina and heather(jacki pett).

You have once again proven yourself to be a fairly decent writer.

As I read this story, I wondered if you were inspired by reading Seabiscuit. The last few paragraphs seemed to indicate you were.

I agree this story should be much longer, if only to fill in the holes in the plot.

I was left with several questions.

Wouldn't such a sentence be considered cruel and unusual?

What testimony was given for the victim's pregnancy?

Why would there be a doctor capable of SRS surgery on the prison staff?

What was the doctor's motivation to be so ugly?

You placed dialogue from two different people in one paragraph. Very confusing.

The Blonde nurse certainly would be aware of the risk of AIDS. Is it plausible she would take his penis into her mouth without protection?

There is no mention of this compassionate nures after that incident.

You used the word 'now' in a past tense sentence, disturbing.

Ears pirced when he wasn't looking . . . How would that ever happen?

Why would he wear nylons over pantyhose?

Taupe shoes with a beige dress. So few accessories. Where was Ellen's fashion sense?

A spritz of cologne behind each ear? What woman would do that? Most would spray the cologne in the air and allow some of it to reach them. Some would dab colgne behind there ears . . . in movies from the 30's.

Would a judge who has just fixed a race stand in the owner's box at the Belmont Stakes?

The timing is implausible. The Belmont Stakes is held about three weeks after the Preakness. For the story to work, the decision to fix the race, the hiring of the participants, the rape and the trial all would have had to take place within those three weeks.

Fawn Healy's fingerprints would be all over the office where she worked for weeks. Why have her wipe a glass?

Why was the sex change necessary to fix the race? This was never explained and shoots a huge hole in the entire scenario.

The richest horserace in the world is not the Santa Anita . . . it appears to be the Dubai World Cup.

I found it amusing you used the not often used term defrocked for the punishment the judge received for frocking Hobson. Congratulations.

As an aside, could you speculate on whether it would be harder or easier for Hobson to make weight as a woman?

In the future, if you'd like me to edit your work, send a copy to me a week or so before you want to post it. We could trade such favors.

Your writing is still the best on this site.

I will be posting revised copies of all my work in a few weeks on several sites, including Crytal's, if she will let me. You are invited to criticize them at that time.

Jill

I nearly didn't read this story, because it was posted with "S&M" in the description, but fortunately my high opinion of the author's other work made me take a look.

I'm not into horse-racing, but as an avid Dick Francis fan, I certainly enjoyed this tale of murky corruption and elaborate conspiracy among the thoroughbreds. The author sets a cracking pace, and the story races to its conclusion like a two-year-old on the final furlong.

Great my dear lovely story It just so good I loved it

Too short its need to be expanded by a few more chapters.