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Home Invasion
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Comment by ashley on 04/05/12
what a lot of rubbish - - - - no more comments required. Comment by Silvia. on 09/14/10 I really think that is one of the worst stories I ever read! Comment by julie j on 03/12/05 this is a good story based on the devious ways of women but the set up was intresting it shows people will do almost anything for money good story Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 06/03/03 Actually, I thought this version was a great improvement. You took care of Most of the problems I noted in my original e-mail. Comment by Ami Lamida on 06/03/03 Slightly better. Definately less confusing in the beginning, but it still begins to get chaotic towards the end. Comment by Nellie D on 06/03/03 Sorry, I can't see that much difference between the original and the revised. I can follow it but it is slightly confusing and not enough background information is given. And I can easily agree with most of the comments about the previous version. Comment by Toni on 05/24/03 I agree with most of the other comments. By the way, who would be blackmailing whom here? I think the genetic males would have the upper hand. Kidnapping, criminal confinement, extortion, various sex crimes- anybody who was involved in forcing the sex, and who later released the tapes, could expect to spend a large chunk of the rest of their lives behind bars. The tapes would be Exhibit A in the criminal charges against them. Comment by Ami Lamida on 05/23/03 Whew...kinda confusing. The characters needed to be developed better to begin with. I found myself constantly referring back to the beginning just to figure out who these events were happening to. Along the same lines as Jezzi Belle's complaints, I also couldn't follow the motivations. The story had too many logic errors. Comment by Jezzi Belle Stewart on 05/22/03 I'm sorry Annie, but this story made no sense to me and seemed full of contradictions: Comment by Axanar on 05/22/03 Enjoyable but a bit sloppy. Some of the players were not completely explained and it was hard to keep track. It also had the look of being rushed which for Annie is extremely rare. Comment by Barbara Lynn Terry on 05/22/03 This was just too wild to swallow...very unrealistic in nature...it would have been much simpler to have "hidden" cameras and then have the men and Don "tricked" into sex with some woman they didn't know...someone they had met either at work or school...but as it went here...not good...and I agree, it was hard to keep track of who was doing what and the twists and turns were too many...not one of your better works Annie... Comment by Carol on 05/22/03 Pleasant enough litle romp, but a little difficult to keep track of all the players. All in all, though, still quite enjoyable. Comment by Paula on 05/22/03 Read better stories from the writer. It was well written and all just the story concept itself didn't appeal to me much. Comment by Prue on 05/22/03 UM what happened to howard? i didn't really like this story sorry annie. i thought it was a waste of annies talent. Comment by GFriday on 05/22/03 Very enjoyable and with some clever twists. By assistant, by the way, do you mean "secretary?" or something else...just wondered. Thanks for a great job Annie. |
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