to jb's friend or jb checked out fictionmania and found additional chapters could not find a site relating to one called betty's some help would be appreicated.also jb if you are able to help. GREAT STORY.                thanks jenny

intersting start to this story will have to read the next part later

There are a few more parts of this on fictionmania and maybe even more at Betty's

I've heard that Toni's health and RL aren't to good these days

I think I will write about T-bone, the obese non-cleaning non hygenic pathilogical liar. Who was the love of someones life. But now not even caring exsists!

When you read a story as captivating and engrossing as this one you want to comment on almost every line. I devoured this story. Thank you so much for writing it! When critiquing eros, much of the conversation is highly individualistic. I concede that one man’s sunami on the senses is another man’s yawner. But since Storysite.org is always pestering us readers to give feedback on what we read, here is mine. Please take these comments in the spirit of friendly feedback.

First the positives. 1)I like reality-connected stories; not that you see 13 year old boys in these straits everyday, but much of the environment of the story was (however tenuously) in the real world. 2) I liked the affection given to Jade. The combination of dominance, embarrassment, and control mixed with tenderhearted ladies is my idea of a good time. 2a) Having to submit to girls his own age, or even younger, was also appealing. 3) The length of this story allowed ideas to develop naturally. It wasn’t simply a “highlight film” of one climax (so to speak) after another. 4)While frilly crossdressing always rules, I liked the, albeit babyish, shorts, overalls and t-shirts, etc, in the story. Come to think of it, for a story in the CD environment, the actual CDing is rather restrained for most of this story - other than Jade’s panty-wearing. Interesting. 5) I really liked the beach adventure - being a naked youngster out in public was charming. The same goes for the backyard sprinkler scene. Sounded rather British, for some reason. 5a) Jade being the mascot of the team is also a wonderful element.

Since you asked, here are elements which I didn’t care for. 1)13 year old Jade’s overt sexual involvement with an adult was off-putting. 2) Much the same goes for his sexual contact with Glyn. 3) While I liked the attention given to cleaning Jade’s bottom - inside and out - it does not extend to the homosexual elements. 4) I don't see why Jade's real Mother was included so much. She was kind of a downer to whole story. 5)As is the friction between two of Jade's caretakers. 6)Lastly, the details of Jade’s poop was not something I look for in a story. Wetting is more “fun”. Poop if you will, but just clean it up and move on. 7)Really lastly. Spell-check and an editor would have eliminated distractions of misspelled words and incorrect usage.

Some possibilities for subsequent chapters. 1)Return to the beach for more activities! Have Jade alternate being naked with some embarrassing/humiliating coverups for “modesty’s sake”. Tiny bikini bottoms, for instance. Or a girl’s sunsuit with the bottom big enough to cover his diaper. 2) Develop the juvenile mascot idea. 3) Introduce a grownup male, a fellow teacher, say, or maybe a boyfriend of one of the teachers - who “suffers” similar treatment to Jade: A much loved and cared for, but dominated man. Thank goodness his students (at least most of them) didn’t know what he wore under his suit while he stood in front of them in class. Nor did they know how wet he was. Close scrutiny of his clothes would indicate that the styling was . . . unusual for an adult man. Etc.  4)Incorporate some more loving discipline - spankings, standing in the corner with pants down, or skirt up, secret public (or pubic) bondage.

Again, thank you Toni for a very entertaining story. I look forward to seeing more adventures of Jade and his friends.

This is an extremely interesting story.  I don't believe I have ever read anything even close to it.  It was both sweet and erotic at the same time, keeping my interest and not allowing me to quit reading until I read it all.  I would love to see it continue.  I would also be interested in reading any other stories by the same author.
Thanks for taking the time to write such a great piece.

I LIKED IT BUT BOTH THE NURSE AND THE TEACHER CAN BE ARRESTED FOR WHAT THEY DID, I DO NOT THINK SO BUT I THINK YOU ELUDED TO THAT AT THE END.

I think the writing is *very* good; the characters are totally plausible, multidimensional, and human; that is *exactly* why I am reacting to JB's plight; and my reactions are emotional. I tend to define "forced fem" more broadly than usual, to include subtle manipulation, some kinds of persuasion, and exploitation of vulnerabilities (subtle force is still force). The character being feminized, infantilized, etc., needn't put up a huge fight against it for me to see it that way; in fact, the weakness and inability of the character to fight it makes the action that much more malicious, to my mind, if the story makes it clear that he really didn't want to go that way. I realize that my "take" on a story can put me at odds with an author's labeling; that's why I try to explain in my comments *why* I felt the way I did. Lots of times, the work an author winds up producing is not quite what they intended. Such is human nature.

I liked this story, Toni.

I think the writing is good, that's why Molly is reacting to JBs' plight, but it probably shouldn't be analyzed too much.

I'm not so sure it is forced fem or femdom either (isn't labeled that way), and JB isn't fighting much, but I guess it might have been if these woman hadn't found the right kid.

Thank you, tOni.

Hi Toni, me again :) One of my comments (for another author) seems to have been deleted (or failed to post). I went to see if any of my other recent ones had suffered a similar fate, and found your reply.

With respect to labeling, I suppose the "age regression" and "diapers" tags might've clued me into some of the story, but I really had no indication that I would encounter a character who had been born into so much suffering, and seemed destined for such a life of misery. I usually avoid forced fem, femdom, humiliation, bad boy to good girl, and some sorts of "caught with consequences" stories, because I have learned from experience that they will frequently contain that sort of misery. I can get all I want of that simply by contemplating my own life; part of why I read fiction is because I want to experience something else. To put the labeling issue in perspective, though, I have found myself reading horrifyingly graphic mutilation scenes with absolutely no warning from the author or other readers; this was nowhere near as extreme.

Perhaps you have heard the saying that "one man's terrorist is another man's freedom fighter." I love it because it is the clearest expression I have yet found of POV -- Point Of View. Similarly, I recognize that one person's (positive) fantasy is another person's nightmare. I know that forced fem, sissification, femdom, and "adult gets turned into a baby girl" stories have huge followings (I also know there are huge numbers of submissives with ads on BDSM personals sites like collarme.com and alt.com, and I have found more than one specialty online shop that makes little girl's fantasy party dresses for adult children). Those sorts of stories, however, are just simply not for me. I do not presume to disparage them, though; who the heck am I, with my own full set of kinks and fetishes, to judge? I meant literally what I wrote, where I was speaking to potential readers: if you like all of these things, then this story is for you.

Like everyone else, my preferences are deeply rooted in my experiences. I like hero stories about people who manage to find their truth and then live their lives according to it, against all of the odds, because that is what I constantly struggle to do. Similarly, I am disturbed by stories about the walking (or limping, or crawling) wounded who are sufficiently weakened and needy that they fall prey to unscrupulous sorts with their own agenda (however well-meaning they may appear on the surface) to further strip the already-injured ones of their sense of Self, because those stories put me right in the pain of my own experiences, and remind me of the many wonderful people I have known whose only sin in life was to have been dropped by the stork onto a freeway in front of a big 16-wheeler, and then spend the rest of their lives trying to put the pieces back together.

I can say that I found your story to be well and powerfully written, which is reflected in my emotional response to it. For example, the most common sub-genre in TG fiction is the pretty, petite boy who, when feminized, makes a spectacularly beautiful (or, at least, totally convincing) girl. Yours is one of the few stories (apart from those where the "boy" turns out to be a more or less intersexed girl) where we are told WHY the main character is so small, and that reason becomes part of a background that creates more pathos than I have seen in almost any other TG story. Me being me, though, I would prefer to see him heal and become strong, rather than see him become a pet that someone will fashion and mold into her own creature.

Like your story, my comments are what they are, a personal response to a personal experience -- the experience of reading your story. I gave it a lot of though because I give the human condition a lot of thought; the stories we tell each other are all reflections of that. Nevertheless, you're welcome. :) I see nothing "over the line" about you asking for more feedback, but then, I have no trouble writing at length either, as I am sure you must have noticed by now. :)

Ahh-well, Molly. It is what it is. I thought it was well labeled and didn't expect to please everyone, you know. Just a fantasy thing.

Actually, I'm not so sure you weren't please. At least you gave it a lot of thought, and I appreciate that, very much.

Thanks for commenting; I love them all!! (Even the critical ones that aren't rants)  {Please, may I have more? -- or is that over the line?}

Many hug, Toni

Famous JB, child of scorn,
  Grew lean while he assailed the seasons.
He wept that he was ever born
  And, my goodness, did he ever have reasons!

Jail Baby, son of Jail Bird, was born right behind the 8-ball. We don't know if he is a pretty boy, but he is very small "...because of all the dumb things that my mom did before I was born." (Can you say "fetal alcohol syndrome"? I knew you could!) Child of abuse, neglect, and foster "care," he currently lives with his mom, who is never more than one parole violation away from prison. Of course, it doesn't take very long for the vultures at his new school to zero in on the fresh meat, and then his suffering resumes in earnest.

And then, two of the school faculty, an instructor and the school nurse, take an interest in and decide to protect him -- sort-of. The price of their "love and affection" (well, it seems better than what he has now) is that he will be infantilized, feminized, and subjected, as a result (did I say they protect him, even 'sort-of'?) to even more intense ridicule at school. Of course, each of these two women wants her little pet baby all to herself, and it looks like there is quite a little squall brewing up on the horizon...

Ho hum, another tale about human misery and suffering in general, about the dark side of human nature, and about the dark side of feminine energy (TWO women, in this case, who seize on the weak and helpless, and manipulate and fashion him into their image, for their own purposes). If you enjoy reading about human suffering, about a seriously damaged and emotionally starving little child being humiliated at school and allowing himself to be put into diapers because it seems to bring *some* affection, about all kinds of scatological stuff going on both outside and inside those diapers (again, mostly because this child is so seriously damaged), about the school nurse rubbing his "tube" while she applies ointment to the rash on his bottom, and then how he gets his other lady friend, the teacher, to rub it for him too, then this story is for you. One thing it is not, though, in my opinion, is sweet and sentimental.