Quite a different story to most.The literally comments do not detract from the story. Please continue with your input of stories. Thanks.

Don't be upset by some of the "literary" comments already made.
It was a great story and I hope the first of many.

Please continue the story, and describe in detail the pregnancy and birth.

I hope you will continue to write and I'm sure you will.  I liked the story but, it was a chore to read.  I don't mean the following to be rude or hurtful. However, please avail yourself of some night classes in basic sentence structure and puncuation. Have a dictionary handy so you don't get into problems such as: waist/waste, heel/heal & etc.

Soldier on,

Pam

It was a wonderful to read story and a sequal story would be great to find out what happened next. Though a magicial transformation rather than an operation might of been best what with the talk in the last paragraph feeling bloated and all the other stuff.

Hi

It needs proof read and it just doesnt merit reading as it stands.

"I'm Became the Wife" might have been a much better story had the Author punctuated the story.  Very differcult reading "run on sentences."  All but impossible to identify thoughts and images trying to be projected when they're all merged in one long paragraph after another.

Here's a tip:  Sentences are the expression of one complete thought.  The word "and" should not be used to continue any sentence or collection of thoughts into infinity.  When tempted to use the word "and" use a period (.) instead.  Use "and" to connect common thoughts to a common statement or point.  Capitalize the first word of the next sentence to express your next statement or thought.  Erase the word "and" from your literary vocabulary and "ditch" the comma's (,).

The shorter you keep your sentences, the more readability you will infuse into your literary efforts.  Plus, the more understandable your finished product will be.  Stories, if not all prose, should be entertaining, enjoyable, informative, but never work.  Reading your story was mental "burn out."  

Just as importantly, make a habit of using the Grammar and Spell Checker incorporated into your Word Processing program.  It will not only correct any spelling errors; but, will also correct your grammar. Thereby eliminating the "run on sentences."