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KNsNdo Very informative article post.Much thanks again. Awesome.

I refr to my previous comments the story was far to quick to happen and no explanation it needs more work done on it to improve the story

intresting things happened so fast it was hard to keep up

Honey, it's a lovely story.  Nothing better than having a really dominant Mistress to serve in every way.  My Mistress was glamourous as well as dominating and I really enjoy serving her.  I've been photographed with her in various stages of dress and undress but none of the photos would I ever put on display.  We do a lot of fun things among which is we'd put on our bikinis and sit in the sun - she wanted me to show tan lines - she'd lay out without her top but liked to have the bikini bottoms leave tan marks across her, well, across her bottom.  I wore a pair of thongs with a matching top and oh, honey, after two weeks, I had these three minisculed patches of triangular white areas over you know where.  It was a delightful feeling to have to show them to her friends.  But we digress.  Love your stories and hope you will continue with them.  Rachel Rae

Fun and interesting albeit perhaps a bit too typical of other stories.  You may wish to slow situational development by being more descriptive of the character's metaphysical integration into her new environment and what memories and analogies are triggered.  Just a thought,  Regardless, I look forward to your next installment.  Take your time though, because your talented and you need to develop your own distinctive style and techniques.