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Into The Pool
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Sam on 01/26/14
great story,i really enjoyed reading it.I thought that maybe at the end that Jenna would tell Kevin,that she was infact Mistress Nina.But all in all a very good read,i enjoy reading all your stories,would love to know where you get all your ideas from...maybe you could let me know sometime....willsamuel@hotmail.co.uk

Comment by Johnny Valentine on 12/28/08
I enjoyed your story very much indeed - very cleverly written, a brilliant plot device, and exquisitely, teasingly unfolded.  I'm off to read your others.  Well done!

Comment by juliej on 04/27/08
brilliant story reading it again it was great

Comment by juliej on 07/23/07
what a great story well done

Comment by juliej on 03/04/06
this is a story that is well deserved of many compliments ms white is an excellent writerthe stories to date i have read are very good a slow revenge process, by an email mistress whom he didnot realise was his assistant didnot even put things together what a way to go who says the female is not devious and sneaky a briiliant story well read and it took me the time to read it well done excellent story i will read more as time goes in the only stries so i do not like are the magical transformations stries the real sticks &stones are the best type of stories i enjoyed every minit of this story, well done &well writtenthankyou  

Comment by Midge on 07/01/05
With "Into the Pool," Ms. White delivers a story that is delightfully paced. Similar to her protagonist, Jenna, the authoress simply will not be rushed in the feminization of Kevin. She takes her time in recounting her tale and for this the reader is thankful.

Ms. White has visited this territory before; an earlier work, "Maxine," has examined the male executive-female secretary role reversal, but "Into the Pool" is clearly a more mature consideration of the topic, vastly superior to her initial foray. In reality, perhaps the primary strenght of "Into the Pool" is that it is not truly a role reversal scenario, as ultimately Jenna and Kevin become colleagues rather than switch positions of authority. This welcomed variation on the theme adds an interesting dynamic to the entire story, allowing the characters greater latitude to move in somewhat surprising directions by story's end, and not conclude in the standard switch of positions that normally marks this genre. Because of this, Jenna's relationship to Kevin is permitted to evolve, since naked ambition was never her motivation and revenge could have been exacted very quickly, yet she holds her hand, fending off the rest of the pool to do so; eventually, she will co-opt them to her way of thinking as well. The reader ends the story wondering (but never quite certain) if Jenna and Kevin have somehow become friends or, at least, are moving in that direction. This intriguing ambiguity is seldom, if ever, found in this type of story.

The use of e-mails via which Jenna conveys her commands to Kevin (to which, of course, the reader is privy) is a marvelous plot device. It moves the story along and permits Jenna to play a double role that is fun to watch. What is especially interesting is that it seemingly allows Jenna to develop two persona; the reader has to occasionally remind themselves that the mysterious mistress and Jenna are one and the same.

Another strength of Ms. White's is that she simply does not introduce a check list of hoops that Kevin must jump through. Ideas are developed, not discarded. For instance, Kevin moves from wearing a light, floral perfume to, by stories end, a much heavier, womanly fragrance. This type of evolution is repeated several times, from breast sizes to various items of clothes and gives the story a smooth flow; a jewlry store scene, at which Kevin changes ear rings, is especially delicious. Good points are also made with such things as the ordering of pink boots that Kevin will not wear, but which will make the others he will seem less threatening. This is a good psychological insight that is employed wisely throughout the story.

Quibbles with the are relatively minor. The wife serves almost no purpose; as a plot device, she could easily be replaced by having Kevin claim all his purchases are for a girl friend. The "oh, by the wife, your getting divored" sequence at the end lands with a resounding thud. Removing the wife would also have erased the problem of Kevin suddenly living in an apartment separate from her, which is not a very good sell. In fact, a parrallel change of Kevin's bachelor pad into that of a bachelorette's would have been enjoyable to watch and given the reader even more story. But these are mereley quibbles and, overall, hardly detract from the quality of Ms. White's story.      

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 06/08/05
I enjoyed Kevin's gradual transition, and, in the end, I think Linda really got what Kevin wanted all along; if it wasn't, he wouldn't have gone along with it when it became clear that obeying Mistress Nina was going to be just as bad as obeying her in terms of everyone seeing him transition, pictures and reality becoming the same.  Did Jenna and the other secretaries actually come to like Linda  and treat her more and more as their equal as her transition progresses?  I hope so.  

The one jarring note was this statement:

<< Betsy took a picture of him, and sent it around, so that Annette could complete her album, documenting his gradual change from high powered male VP, to lowly female secretary.  >>

As written it seems to imply that the secretaries thought of themselves as inferior to the male executives.  I think it would have been better written to show that that is what they think Kevin will considers his transition to be.

Comment by samantha2 on 05/08/05
excelklent long story ,just how i like them .Keep it up

Comment by Axanar on 05/07/05
CLASSIC! BRAVO! ABSOLUTELY PERFECT!



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