NO IT IS NOT a story of revenge. He only knew jenn. What is the motive of the other two girls? So many people have this gendre tatooed into their brain that they read into the story what is NOT THERE!

I agree with Jezzy... It is not enough to justify their treatment of him for them to just say he didn't treat women very well. The only way to resolve that inconsistency is to hold the girls explanation of his treatment as her being untruthful which would negate the justification of their treatment of him. Anyway you slice it without build up the girls just come across as evil despicable bitches.

intresting story but needs a bit more type was small and to close together but ok

It is extremely difficult to read. Did not even try

my sissy name is "vickie" and I loved this story ...i jerked off and seductively sucked on a misty 120s menthol cigarette as i read 'is my name tammy'  with pink lipstick and long black mascara on my eyelashes.  i am jerking off again and will cum and eat it for a 3rd time!  thank you so much....slut slave 'victoria'

How can you write something so bad like this?
Silvia.

great story but learn to fucking press the enter key!

Great story.  One of the best out there. Don't listen to the naysayers.

I thik treating Tammy as a little baby girl would have been enogh, but your story was "colouful".

Amy.

a good story of revenge butin one paragraph this needs to be adjusted a bit but is good

this again is a story of revenge its great and most enjoyable the story though was 1 loooooooooong paragraph i feel that a bit mor of an explansttion by the the girls would have been beter but it was a goood story

    I agree with most of the above comments, but my main critisism is the physical structure of the story.  My God, it is one LOOOOOOOONG paragraph!  Pick up a used copy of Strunk and White's writing style book.  You should be able to pick it up for a few bucks at a used bookstore.  Your story is just run together, and too darn hard to even try to read to the end.

Please, for the love of Mike, if you ever write another story: use some paragraphs! I just skimmed this one for words like cock, diaper, cum...otherwise this damn thing woulda blinded me!

Its like a cinderblock.

a sweet revenge for things past good story wellwritten

a very good set up I think the girls were extracting revenge the pace set was quite fast but intresting,their is a future for anothe addition to this story it might be worth thinking about his progreesion into little girl then teens and so on it wil make an intrestingstory better and turn into a great story

While the story had a highly erotic nature to it it might have been a good idea to introduce the characters like his ex-girlfriend earlier and the reason why they broke up.  Also it might have been a good idea to explain the reason why he was being treated earlier. You also didn't include how, if he was so sissified, the girls expected him to pay his share of the rent. Was he being paid for some of his services. Was he made to do some chores or maid training. You might want to include these things if you should decide to expand this story.  your spelling and tenses need work as well. Over all though I found the story to be arousing especially when Tammy was made to suck out the cum from the girl's cunt which she followed with her piss.

very heavy needs some more body to be believable but a good start you can do so much more to this story

NEEDS TO BE MORE BELIEVABLE---USE LESS CHARACTERS--TRYING TO COVER TO MANY SCENARIOS WITH TOO FEW WORDS.

While I didn't read the story the premise is my type. Please format it so others can read it better.

There was no prep for his extremely nasty treatment.  Jenn was described as "an old friend"  There was no hint in his behavior to support the "Rich treated girls like objects" statement, which was not deliuvered till right near the end of the story.