I've always been fascinated with the motivation of a boy wanting to dress and be treated as a girl. Janes' story has given me some great insite why a normal healthy boy would be so interested in skirts and all things feminine. The acceptance girls get, the way we are treated and of course the clothes we can wear are all factors.
I still have much to learn but thank you Jane for sharing your knowledge and experience.

I'm afraid the story I Want What I Want needs a real good proofread. The story has some merit but the grammatical and typing errors make it very difficult to read.

Oh yes I agree, writing stories is hard.  That is why they teach courses at the universities.  And even the most published authors have proofreaders.  One doesn't want grammar and punctuation to get in the way of telling the story.

Wonderful, heartfelt story.  Thanks for sharing it.

Hi Jane, Just a line to say I enjoyed your story.You asked if follow ups would be appreciated ,from my point of view the answer would be yes. OK, I can understand the criticism of some of your readers,but I don't believe that it spoils the storyline. To any that do, the answer is in their hands.No one forces anyone to read anything. Keep up the good work Jane,Writing stories is more difficult than a lot of peaple realise.

I was really impressed with your story, all I would add though is in support of an editor to "clean up' your story, it would go good for a bit then get a bit messy and I had a hard time trying to sort out what you were saying. I'm not advocating a major change in style, just some cleaning up.

Dear Jane:

Once again, your incredibly profound soul shines as a beacon guiding the way to empathy. I think it is especially interesting if one juxtaposes this story to two equally profound stories, one done several months ago by Paul G. Jutras (now Paula Jutras (?)) and one incredibly well-written tale several weeks later by another site author; these stories both telling tales of TS's who could not gain acceptance of their families, then committed suicide.  In this more hopeful tale, the half-hearted botched suicide attempt paves the way for acceptance by his family, friends, and the attending physicians and case workers.  With these skids now greased, our heroine, Dawn, has the tools she needs at her disposal to handle the inevitable problems that develop, and they are vividly described for us.  

Now, certainly as a matter of real-life policy, I do not counsel favorably on suicide attempts, botched or otherwise.  But, it is interesting to note the very different outcomes envisioned by the authors in the tales when the gravity of the need to adjust to one's true gender forces the issue upfront.  The key issue being, of course, whether acceptance of a live TG family member is preferable to death or disenfranchisement.  I guess the point I wish to make by contrasting these works of fiction that, nevertheless, reflect very real problems is that the order of the timeline is of supreme importance.  It seems that in these works of fiction, and perhaps in life, the earlier a support network can be built and fostered among the people most influential in a TG's life, the higher the probability of the TG being able to make a healthy transition to her (his?, less background whether the same is true for F-M trannies except where the "F" was doctor-created as a result of not understanding testicular feminization) new life.

Jane, sorry for going off on this tangent, but it does reflect well on how thought-provoking I found YOUR story.  

As for Jane's dialectic writing style from blue-collar and northern UK, unfamiliar to most of us who visit the site, it should be by now established that this is her style -- take it or leave it.  It is not wrong -- just hers, come by honestly through her life experiences.  

To those criticising, I ask: Would you bowlderize Mark Twain's dialectical writings to conform more to Northern grammatical standards?  Would you re-write the poems of e.e. cummings to include proper capitalization? To do so would risk losing the ethnic flavour and passion so intrinsic to the very lifeblood of the works in question.  

Jane, perhaps upon submission, you could ask Crystal to include a parenthesized paragraph stating something along the lines that "The following is written dialectically reflecting the mores and experiences with which I grew up.  If, knowing this, the grammatical construction utilised herein makes the story unenjoyable, unfathomable, or incomprehensible to you, may I suggest that you return to the main site and peruse other works instead.  Thank you for your kind understanding regarding this matter."  Alternatively, you could say, "Ef-u and the white horse you strode in here on!"  Both would work for me!

Love & Huggles,
Sheryl S.

This a sweet, touching tale despite some of the flaws indicated in other comments.  SO what? It is an enjoyable read, one that reflects the fact that transitioning presents problems from other in society.  That is called honesty in writing.
I look forward to reading about her first days in school.
Cordially,
Mardee

Your stories are becoming boring, Jane.  For one thing you seem unable to spell or construct sentences very clearly. Also you overuse the "Jane" "June" business.  It's to the point where it is easy to predict the direction your stories are going from the first two or three sentences.  The spelling is embarrassing.  You are in desperate need of an editor.

An interesting story.  Not too shabby.  However, I don't know if you were trying to mimic a 14 year old's manner of writing, or need a little help in the proofreading department.  Even if you were trying to mimic the style of a 14 year old, it was a hard read for me.  There were some problems with punctuation that made it very hard to read and understand the story.  Also, I am not too sure that the back and forth time shifts between some paragraphs was an effective device to use in telling the story.

touching tale