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Jack Turning Into Jackie
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Comment by this is me on 10/02/12
His mom mellowed out but I still can't get over her punishing him nor can I get over his sister lying about the nature of him being in diapers when his mom caught him. A little contrition would clear that right up but it wasn't mentioned again. Seriously, the mom pitches a fit the first time yet all the while she is telling him to be a man she is redecorating his room and throwing out his guy clothes. What a wishy washing dame. Comment by Stew on 12/13/11 Superb information here, ol'e chap; keep bnuring the midnight oil. Comment by Dianna on 03/07/08 I suffered through the errors and formatting problems but....ugh. The beginning: I still don't understand why poor Jackie was punished for something beyond her control! That was beyond cruel. Comment by julij on 06/24/06 another story of a punishment getting into something else i will have to re read this again at another time a game that strted out fun ended up as hell but in her heart i imagine the mother always wanted another girl this proves it please the spelling&grammer needs to be improved Comment by Missy on 01/10/06 Decent story, but the grammar, spelling, and sentence construction was appalling! your first sentence needed at least a comma, and probably broken down into 2 sentences. Your spelling is very poor, and it appears that you didn't even try to use spell check software. Comment by Robi M on 08/10/05 I loved the premis of the story, I really liked the flow. It could really use a proofing though. The ending was a bit abrupt, and I think it needs to be fleshed out a bit more in his reactions the incident. Comment by Angel O'Hare on 08/08/05 I admit I had to stop reading this. There are so many mistakes that it could not have been proofed even once. Please have this proofed and at least re-read your story before posting it. |
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