I have the same problem with the story that everyone else seems to have plus the added problem of a lack of rage at being violated. Why do these stories always lack that sense of being violated by the victims of these crimes? I KNOW that even if I learned to accept the outcome I could not just forget the process with which I had arrived at the outcome.

This "free sharing" of information seems too good to be true. Like cmnomuism.

I felt a little cheated when it came to the end. What did the girls think of Deanna and Jackie? You didn't really leave us with a whole lot. If you're going to show someone having a joke turned back on them, please show how they react.

Little ditty about Jack and Dean
2 American kids growin’ up where it’s mean.
Jackie's gonna be a baseball star
Deanna debutante backseat of Jackie's car

Suckin' on George’s log outside the tastee freeze
Deanna's sittin' on Jamie's lap
He's got his hand between her knees
Jackie say "Hey George lets run off
Behind a shady tree"
Dribble off those Bobby Brooks
Let me do what I please.
And Jackie Say

Oh yeah life goes on
Long after the thrill of cumin’ is gone
Oh yeay say life goes on
Long after the thrill of cumin’ is gone, they walk on

Jack sits back reflects his thoughts for the moment
Life in a frock seems the best for him an’ Dean.
“Well Deanna, we oughtta run from this city”
Deanna says "Baby, let’s find a new scene "
Jacky say a

Chorus

Gonna let it rock
Let it roll
Let the Bible Belt come down
And Save My soul
Hold on to your sweet thing as long as you can
Changes come around real soon
Make us women, once men

Little ditty about Jack and Dean
Two American kids growin’ up where its mean

Well I have to say I was quite disappointed with this story.  As Sue pointed out there was no indication in the beginning that the boys were being hypnotized, they seemed to simply sit there and let the girls shave them and make them up, not even noticing what was going on.  And the two nerds seem to have no problem admitting to everyone that they have sex with guys.  And the ending is so trite they simply love being female based on what?  The gang raping?  They don't seem to have any pleasant experiences as women on which to hang their end decision.

The concept for this story was great, but Jennifer needs to tighten up her writing, which I found rather ragged.  For example, she should state at the beginning that Dean and Jack are hypnotized when they first dress.  This only becomes apparent later on.  There were other holes in the plot as well.  Also, the boys characters could have been more fully developed instead of relying on trite stereotypes of the school jocks and nerds.  Nevertheless, I see a lot of potential here and encourage Jennifer Allison to keep writing and improving.