the triumph one is finished. the britney story i decided to give up on because it was kind of silly and i got some critizinm on. this one i will finish when i can work on it enough.

Before I take the time to read this story, I just wonder why you haven't finished two prior stories? The last entry for those stories was back in 2004.

Lou

Very heavy story, but should be worth it.

I was starting to wonder where the TV aspect was, but it is there, just a little way down.

A couple of instances of "shutter" as well...
This seems very common on the site.
Actually, I read a story the other day that had someone closing the shudders... maybe you should swap?

Uh, well, interesting.  Very emotional subject.  It will be interesting to see how it develops.

There are some grammar errors.  Maybe you would like to fix them before moving ahead with this story.  For example, in the first paragraph you wrote, “Mass for the Dead, is how it translates to.”  To what?  I don’t think you meant to include the “to.”  Mass for the Dead, is how it translates.  Or perhaps, Mass for the Dead, is how it translates to English.  Of course the second version lacks the feel for the mood that you were trying to establish with the first paragraph.  

Just little minor things like the above that are hard for the auto checkers to catch.  I love computers, but sometimes human eyes are better.