I really liked this story since it was of a type that I had not read before. Excellent! Those that comment otherwise, below, obviously have a personality problem themselves, which is generally to be expected. One must be open minded and accept that these stories are bound to be 'odd', since anyone writing them on such a site, must have a slightly unusual outlook on life. It is only now, after all my 75 years, that I thought I would like to read something very different to scientific literature, which is the norm for myself. Dracy.

i normaly love ure work but this made me sick i am what most ppl call a tom boy first ther is nothing wrong with it and i dont like how u make it seem that all tomboys want to be male i dont in fact i hate the male gender this story realy makes me wonder about you most of your work shows you belive in female rights but then this makes me wonder if u dont just want all girls to be girly girls

First off, I hate that mother and I want her to die, If I could I'd have her tortured to the brink of death, force fed testosterone and given a full mastectomy, and much much more. People tried to use crap like this on me, and it didn't work. I'm still a girl, it's ridiculous to think that you could do something like that to a child. Much less this child that was so obviously a FtM. For some reason, transkids have more resilience ((From what I've seen)) to this kind of thing, but genetic borns, don't. And the bunch of crap about women can't do math that well, well whoever made those tapes was too stupid to realize that women can be anything they want. Sometimes men are born in women's bodies as well, just like some women are born in men's bodies. Anyone who would truly use this on a child, just because they weren't happy with how much of a girl their daughter was, deserves to die.

So far, I have gotten a virus email (killed before it could infect my system) as a result of the notes here, but no real reply. Jennifer, do you even read these?

I'm not sure the email link went to you with the comment, so here it is:

bgoodric@netzero.net

(God, I feel naked now!!)

I would like to talk with you about a variation of this story. I have a first draft written, but will not release it without your permission (and preferably help). It answers several of the criticisms, and takes things in a slightly different (and more flexible) direction.

sorry, jen, bit i agree with most of the others and think it would have better as a female to male change story.  it was well written otherwise, but seemed almost a horror story.  i felt like i did when my parents found me dressing and sent me to a shrink to get straightened out all over again.

Look --  at first I thought this story had been done before.   However the writer opened herself"?" up to continueing the story different than all the rest.   I am almost tempted to write a part, where the mother realizes the wrongs she id not only to LANA, but also to Matt.   The opens to a deep a dark tragedy but maybe the mother can realize some good before losing her two kids.

Also I agree with a previous comment that the story was going great until the Mother found Matt , and then it was over with no true feelings coming from the narrator Lana.  We want more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

When I first read this story, my reaction was pretty much the same as the others- that it reinforces the old female stereotypes. However, om second reading, I realized that Jennifer had actually written a parody. Unfortunately, the old stereotypes still persist in society, even today. Remember the talking Barbie a few years ago that said "Oooohhh, math is so hard"? The story was a useful reminder that some things still haven't changed.

A nice little horror story for Halloween.

I was hoping for a bit more from this story as I thought it would show that TG isn't just M to F.  There are GGs that happen to have the wrong body for their gender.

The writer decided to do something else with this story than I expected.  I am not sure exactly what the writer was trying to say here.

I usually like Jennifer's stories, but this one made me ill. Literally.

This is the year 2003, and today, women can be everything they want to be, from tomboys to even being transsexual. They are astronauts (three have died on spaceflights, as well as Christa McAuliffe, a teacher), sports legends, firefighters, police officers, military enlisted and officers; the list goes on and on and on...

To force Lana into something she wasn't all because mommy lives in a "Father Knows Best" make-believe world, is child abuse to the extreme!! If I were writing the story, both parents and the "Doctor" who developed this abomination would be spending a number of decades in jail for their crimes.

On a scale of 1 to 10, I'd give this story a minus number to the 100,000,000,000th power.

The warm up was better than the actual transformation.  We had a story, characters, and even a plot.  Then Mom finds Matt, and it felt like three seconds later the story was over.

One of the problems about writing in the first person is that the main character ends up having to be all-knowing.  In other words, if the main character doesn't know about something, it really can't be included in the story because that's who is doing the narration.  Likewise, the story teller can't conveniently "forget" things at the end of the story that s/he knew earlier on.  

In other words, Lana can't forget that she was a Tomboy, that she was good at math, that she tricked her brother into the watching the DVDs or any of the other things about her life. If she's forgotten those things, how can she be telling us about them?  It might be different if you had her telling us those things as they were happening (perhaps as a series of letters to a friend?) but that's not how it's written.  

Not a bad story, and an interesting twist on the "forced feminization" theme.  I have a niece who is quite the tomboy.  Her mother keeps getting her frilly dresses, but my niece always ends up in her jeans playing baseball.  Her mother might be interested in those DVD's.

However, I really must take issue with this totally unfounded and ridiculous notion that you have included in your story, that girls are poor at math.  Nothing could be further from the truth.  I am an engineer and have many female colleagues, all of whom had to master calculus, differential equations, linear algebra, and other mathematical disciplines in order to join the engineering profession.  Several of my professors in math, science, and engineering were women.  Please, please, PLEASE do not perpetuate the idiotic notion that it takes a Y chromosome to become an engineer or a scientist.  I have seen far too many girls turn away from a career in science or engineering because of this foolishness.  Girls can do the math!  Geek girls rule!

Agnes is a manipulating bitch.
George is a spineless wimp.
Lana is an amoral brat.
Characters you love to hate.
Poor Matt.