This is a great fantasy...  What it shows is that Dan can't live without the rules Al laid out.  Dan has been waiting for someone to make all the decisions.  No matter how bad Al treats Dan, Dan feels he is doing the right thing. He is doing the things he wishes a woman would do for him but never will so since he craves it so much he acts out the woman's role and has a tight cage on his actions laid out by Al.  Sure a second part can be added, and more details on how Al likes his bitch to perform  should be a pleasure.

-Brit

I guess it had to happen.  You have been so prolific, with such a wonderful stream of stories, I had gotten in a habit of coming to a conclusion even before I finished reading.  Not so with this one.  It seems incomplete.  I understand the choice that was made but not the logic.  I know, it is my blondeness coming through. I am already looking for your next story, with eager anticipation.

Jennifer, you've been cranking out some pretty good tg fiction at a furious rate for over a year now. This one, however, falls flat on its face (troublesome high heels, no doubt) both with regard to plausibility as well as to satisfaction afforded the reader.

For the latter, I must admit, I tend to appreciate stories that often leave some interesting action to the readers' imagination. But gee whiz, this one leaves virtually everything for me to fill in. It's just not enough of a core story to work with. (I tried, I tried, but maybe I didn't understand it all.)

If Dan didn't really want to be Jayne, wouldn't he have eventually just chucked his pension plan and ridden off into the sunset nursing his defeat? Or if he did want to be Jayne, why would either he or Al have had Jayne appear on the doorstep every morning for the duration?

And you omitted the title act. Naughty you!

Once you busted his arm you sweetly  tell him that if it get back to anyone oh dear. Never knowing when and how is no way to live. Ex girlfriend before I had before transistion had  real creep giving her grife. I made sure  he did not again. I had some mates from well, back me in case his mates pitched in and bounced him around his flat when I knew there was a couple of his mates there nothing  like being bounced by a TS IN FEM TROUSER SUIT in front of your mate s . Most of these big boys when it comes to can't fight their way out of paper bag .Also  they like to hit but can't take a hit .If you fight sometime you get hit so what it might mess the make up  so. I would never let anyone rule me unless for fun . Stand or die that the only way. UNless you like it that is. Oh if you want to think yah right I don't give a ----.