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Lawrence's Accident
by Elaine

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Comment by Pablo on 01/08/13
All of these artciels have saved me a lot of headaches.

Comment by Jerry on 08/04/11
I like your story it was well thought out but I'm not sure if such could go quiet so easy I thank there would be more fight in him/her ,but I don't know it is a good story and I liked your characters alot thank you

Comment by Ally on 03/30/09
I liked the story. Yes some issues were glossed over. However, it would have been a much longer story had you left them in. In the main this was happy story and being a sucker for happiness, I was pleased with story.
Love Ally!!!

Comment by Kitty on 11/12/08
What the doctors said, sickened me. That she wasn't acting "girlish" enough, that Laura was supposed to be all girlish and her movements and actions were supposed to be "totally feminine" and all that garbage mew. Let the kid decide what kind of girl she wants to be, or if girl isn't an option for Laura, better to go on T like transmen do. Then the aversion therapy like tactics for making "Laura" more of a "girl" sickened me to my heart and soul. Aversion therapy is also used in "curing" transsexualism you know? Or crossdressing, in fact it does a darn good job at increasing suicide rates, so why would it work on this child? These backwards doctors need to open their eyes and look how girls really act ><

Comment by Briar on 07/26/07
This story was unusual because it was told in the person of the Father rather than the subject/victim herself.  This made it a fresher, more neutral point of view.  

Though the parents seemed to have decided straight away to accept what the doctors told them, and more or less forced the child to switch to thinking of herself as female, one wonders whether inside the Laura/Laurence character would have been that compliant and easy to switch.  A few real life case examples have turned out rather badly.  Brain seems to decide sex, not outer appearances.  Otherwise why would there be so many crossdressers?

But apart from the transition being rather glossed over, the story was an interesting one and almost believable.  Of course, how the child REALLY felt about things was easier to gloss over when the story was written from the Father's point of view, which was rather a neat way to avoid the issues!

I was left feeling slightly disturbed by the idea.

Briar


Comment by Rone Welles on 07/02/07
  The parents were a little rough on a child that had a trama like that she should have been alowed to come to gripps with the problem in a more genteel way .. a good story and a talented writer . Thank you for sharing with us  ... Rone

Comment by Will It Work on 07/03/05
While technically well done (although there were _some_ grammatical errors), this story was very upsetting.

While perhaps it is useful in terms of telling the story, the overwhelming retraining of the Lawrence|Laura seems while accurate, barabric.  Many of today's therapists seems to hold that extremes in overcoming a handicap of whatever nature is the only solution, however, I should think that some middle ground could have been reached in this case.

Comment by francesca Barrie on 04/02/01
Lovey little story about what I would have thought was a common TG daydream (it is for me anyway) I guess you know by now how I am for happy endings. Pity mum had to die though



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