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The Life of Twins
by Freddy Hill

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Comment by Aleesha on 06/17/10
Quite a good story and very different. Thanks.

Comment by Lorelei on 01/09/09
Yes, despite the spelling errors and the mentioned impossibility of different-sex identical twins, I still love the basic situation of a brother and sister pretending to be each other through clothing switches, etc. We need more stories, films, and TV shows presenting the idea. The Swedish film "Tur Retur", for example, was a variation on this.

Comment by tanya on 07/10/03
loved all four parts, but hope you will work on the spelling.

Comment by Paula on 07/09/03
Part 4 was just so sweet dear it was great

Comment by Night Wolf on 07/06/03
Even though you have improve there are still a few spelling mistakes that are poping up!  But over all the story has been written very well.  Each part seems to be getting better and better it seems like when you were taught how to right in grade school you actually payed attention to the teacher!  And I must say your doing a wonderful job please keep it up!

Comment by Paula on 07/02/03
Was a little lost at the start of the story until I reviewed part 1 but over all I loved part 2 even more than part 1. Especially when mom took her new daughter shopping.

Comment by mike on 06/19/03
i loved the story, even with a lot of spelling mistakes.

Comment by John on 06/19/03
Interesting story.
However, as an identical twin myself, I think I should point out something.

Barring a chromosomal abnormality (an extra sex chromosome, in this case "Y"), identical twins are ALWAYS of the same sex, because they develop from the same fertilized egg.

There are cases of fraternal twins of different sexes resembling each other, but there is NO SUCH THING as IDENTICAL twins of different sexes.  

Comment by Tamara Rand on 06/19/03
Dear Freddy:  This was a real nice start of a story with a new and fresh idea (identical twins in every way but one).  I had no problem with the physical stuff between the twins. In fact, I think that sort of thing happens much more frequently than most are willing to admit, and for the most part involves no lasting harm to either party.  You should take your story wherever you think it needs to go.

One thing I would suggest for the future, though, is that you use more actual dialog.  Just because the story is told from Fred's point of view, don't feel that you need to have Fred report to us what Mel told him; rather, just have Mel say it.  Actual dialog is much easier for your readers to follow, and it makes the action move faster and seem more real.  It's just another version of the old advice to writers:  Show; don't tell.  Good luck.  I'm looking forward to the next installment.
......Tamara Rand.

Comment by Barbara Lynn Terry on 06/19/03
this is a very nice story so far...but i hope that this is not a brother/sister romance...I can't wait to find out what happens at the dance either...

Barbara Lynn Terry

Comment by Paula on 06/18/03
this is truely the type of sweet and wonderful story I love reading the most. Hope all your stories are as good as this one.



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