great story but where is part 2 ? or part 3

Very bad story.

Really good start, can't wait for part two,..:-)

Good start, but I guess we will never know how it turned out.
"SIGH"
Ann

Having just read this tail I am also disapointed that there is no follow on.  Hope is that it comes soon a year is a long time to wait.

JB

Guess Part II is never coming.  Sad, since this had potential.  

Belladonna, when is part two gonna be out?  You said in November "next week".  It's MARCH now lol.  Please, it was a good start, and I really want to read the rest.

Abigail

a good start to the story

Ok OK I hear youNext week by Thursday I will submit the second instalment Its slow going for me sorry please be patiant . I will sumbmit shorter instalments to make it go faster.

                     HUGs!!!!
                 Belladonna

part two onegai~!!

part to onegai~!!

Interesting story as it goes; I do feel that a nine year old boy would not be calling his older sister a "B", but in this day and age who knows. Does seem like the sister over reacted to everything. Am wondering how the next segment of the story will be.
Good beginning tho. J-Lynn

Great story, girlfriend! The cursing could have been toned down a little. I can not wait for Part 2. (Maybe, Jackalina goes to tap dancing/ballerina classes with the girls... )

WOW! I didn't expect such a response. I worte this on a whim and forgot I even submitted it. I want to thank all of you for your commints the good and the bad. I will try to incorperate your sugestions into part two. And seeing the demand for it I will start that today. I didn't excpect that people would be clamering for it. Anyway to answer your questions there so many I hope I get them all.

1.First of all the name Jackalina. No one seemed to like it, My mistake. I origonaly wrote this just for me and I was having fun with that cutsy yet unbelivable name. I will change it in part two.

2. Valentine Asked why dosn't he find a adult and tell on his sister? Val missed the point, Pam would then tell all his friends back home what a sissy he was and thats a enbarasment he couldn't Face. After all he is a rough tough boy not a pansey little girl. Anyway this is funner.

3.Whats a whipper snipper? I took creative licence and made that up. I got the name from a old macdonnles commercial were a bunch of girls in a club called wipper snippers play in the rain. As for what a whipper snipper is? Best I can imagine its a insect much like a lady bug.

4. Were did Pam get chloriform? I don't know, Chem class. Supention of disbelive on that one.

5.Pam apparantly is quite short sighted.  Although I believe that Jack asked for much of what he's getting, he also sounds way to adolescent to be nine.  it doesn't matter, though, because Pam is making an enemy for life out of her brother; she may think she has control, but she'd better watch her back after this is over.  I'm sure she'll go the "I've got pictures." route, but she may push him to the point where she was at where he just wants to get even and doesn't care about the future.  Things will simply escalate into outright hatred on both their parts and that will affect the whole family.  If I was Jack, I would just go along with Pam's plan, bide my time, act like, "OK, it wasn't so bad; we're even.", wait about six months, and then, when she least expects it ...
He He He I think you'll like what I got planned.

6. I been told this is not a altered fates story. Sorry first time I ever did any thing like this and I will be more aware of that in the future.

Finally Thank you all. You comments have inspiered me I will begin part two and maybe make the chapters shorter. I never been in a community like this before and the creative out let is wonderful.Thank you. xoxoxoxoxox

Bella

WHEN IS PART TWO COMING OUT!!!!!!!!!........

SO GET A MOVE ON WITH IT

  Well done you could have done as well with out the cuss words from a nine year old that was a little much ... Jackie would be a
nice name ... maybe she/he could get feed up with teasing from the boys and deck one of them ...  Tomboy style and the other girls cheer her/him  on .... Brownies come before girl scouts and thier uniform is brown and green ...keep him hidden as long as you can and maybe he will like it ... perhaps they get home late and mom finds out about jackie and keeps him in a dress for a while to calm him down ....   Keep up the good work you have a good story going ...
Thank you  Rone

It was a very nice part one..cute and sentimental in its own way....let's keep her in dresses for many more chapters...hugs.

Kind of ok, I think it might be better if the two girls knew she was a he and have some fun with him. Terrible name.

i loved the first part of your story,please write next part very soon and email me when you do ok,love pansyamy

This is another one of those, why doesn't Jack just go find some adult and tell them what is going on. Sure it wouldn't make for a good story, but it would be a whole lot more realistic. Or he could just act like himself, let his sister try to explain that, no boy that wants to dress like a girl is going to act like a boy while dressed. The adults would then be all over the sister.

What kind of name is Jackalina anyway?

I agree with Jezzi. Although I am not a parent, I don't think nine year old boys would express themselves that way. And although Jack seems to be rambunctious, as young boys are, I did not read anything anywhere in your story to indicate he deserved this kind of punishment. Interesting though and I want to see where you're going with this, so I'll continue reading.I've never seen the term "Whippier Snipper" before either-- did you make that up?
Peace-- hippie cheerleader

Not to sound dumb....but what is a Whipper Snipper?  I have never heard the term before.  Girl Scouts, yes.  Girl Guides, yes.  Whipper Snippers, not so much.

Other than that, it's an ok start. Myself, personally, would have given young Jack a different girls name, as Jackalina is just a bit odd, but that's minor.  I look forward to part 2 and beyond.

Where did Pam get the chloroform?

Pam apparantly is quite short sighted.  Although I believe that Jack asked for much of what he's getting, he also sounds way to adolescent to be nine.  it doesn't matter, though, because Pam is making an enemy for life out of her brother; she may think she has control, but she'd better watch her back after this is over.  I'm sure she'll go the "I've got pictures." route, but she may push him to the point where she was at where he just wants to get even and doesn't care about the future.  Things will simply escalate into outright hatred on both their parts and that will affect the whole family.  If I was Jack, I would just go along with Pam's plan, bide my time, act like, "OK, it wasn't so bad; we're even.", wait about six months, and then, when she least expects it ...

This is not an Altered Fates story. It is only a nine year old boy made to dress like a girl.

The Rules for the Altered Fates universe are posted on this site in the Authors corner, read it.

They had problems with stories mislabeled as Altered Fates stories at Fictionmania until the category title was changed to: Jenifer Adams' Altered Fates universe.