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another writer that needs issues examined by a professional,,people that show hatred of males or females i pity, i have no plesure in saying this but this story is mean cruel and just plain trash

an intresting story but to short

It's always fun watching the early writings of new authors and then watching them develope.  I see your story. And I saw you develope your theme.  But the average reader isn't as smart as you nor are they familiar with what you are tryong  to say.  Your complex sentence structure needs parsing and punctuation.  A good editor can do that for you and allow you the joy of creation.

Its a fun read, even if it seems cruel and unjustified.  Thank you for sharing it with us.

Could do with some basic punctuation particularly inverted commas.

Cindy, I think you omitted the most important part of your story, the first part. That's where we might have read about the situation: courtship, marriage, settling down, maybe a bit of love culminating in a sexual relationship of some sort, then the cruel behavior of the young man (if you gave his original name, I have forgotten because the fellow himself was of no particular interest).

How did the wife go from agreeing to marriage to the point we find her in this (very) short story? Surely she had an inner life -- here, one filled with turmoil and resentment. And then, something happened. She seized the helm of their little ship and became the captain. How on earth did THAT happen? I mean, what happened inside her to bring about her totally new stance toward life?

At the end, the only vision we (and our now long-suffering heroine) have of the future is endless labor and (s)exploitation. This is pretty grim stuff, don'tcha think? -- What if, for instance, little Cindy were treated so that she liked her new lifestyle? (And so that we got to read about her new-found pleasures?)