BaZe8J Thank you for your post.Thanks Again. Much obliged.

Back in scohol, I'm doing so much learning.

Great concepts.  Only wish you hadn't emphasized "elderly" so much.<p> <p>
If Simone is such a young woman, why should her mother be elderly?<p>
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Rationally, couldn't her mother be an "overweight middle-aged matron"?<p>
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I'm inclined to say "Please write another episode."<p>
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And certainly continue the "magic people" theme, wish credits and all!<p>
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Good luck!

Another great story, am eagerly awaiting your next one. dont forget to continue the others lol. huggles from your new fan prue

I hope this is only part 1!  So nice to see the good GUYS win for a change!  

This is a very entertaining concept- haven't seen anything like it before- and i love originality on this site. One suggestion, though- there was too much repetition of "fat, elderly, etc", wish credit, and wish insurance. Your readers are smart enough to figure those things out at the first mention., and repetitive use gets a little boring. The ideal- and i know it's not easy- is to let the reader see just enough of your universe to understand what's going on, without beating them over the head with it. That aside, i get the feeling that this is just part one of several, and i'm looking forward to see how our hero gets his revenge on Linda/Simone. Please- take your time- and give us lots of detail- i love seeing the screw twist ever so slowly.

Magic ability as a 'bank account'. Haven't seen that lately. Leaves you open to theft and other forms of abuse, which crook types forget can go both ways, especially if you protect yourself.

Looking at more than just this story: why the 'Men against controlling women' in all four of Mr. Hicks' stories? Maybe he read too many accounts of women abusing their position of authority? Or maybe it's "Don't abuse your position/ability- the result may backfire on you if you do."

KR