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Meko
by Zedd

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Comment by Danielle on 09/13/05
 Hi

 While I thought that this story had some great points and wonderful visualization I can't help but be put off a bit by the total no win sceanario for the boyfriend. I would love for him to regain his memory to get away from virtual slavery and mabey turn the tables on his rather callus ex-(or possibly never)girlfriend. This does smack of white slavery and as so does leave a slight sour taste in the mouth. If you do not wish to do this then maybe you would allow me to. The sexiness is stripped away from this story by the fact that the boyfriend doesn't even know what's going on. Then the fact that the women is allowed to make money off of an innocent man is actually annoying. Now a wife beater or serial rapist I would go along with.....Hmmmmm! Now that's an idea!!

     I hope there is a sequel as you do write well.

        All my best,

                             Danielle Richards


               













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