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The Mentor
by Jennifer White

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Comment by John on 03/24/08
I am reminded of the "Boot Camps" for teens, described on nospank.net as "Torturing Teens for Fun and Profit."  I really hope that the criminals here get what's coming to them.  The kidnapping scene here echoed the standard practice of having goons come and grab the teen boy and spirit him off to the school.


Comment by SassySue on 03/04/08
While I agree with Briar that the characters were synthetic, at least those other than the hero(ine), I genuinally enjoyed this story and appreciated the cruel way that Walt was forced to take his punishmant and rewards. After all, there are only so many ways that you can change a bad boy into a good girl.  

Thanks to Jenifer for writing and posting this story.

SS


Comment by Briar on 03/02/08
I am sorry Jennifer, but this story was just so cold and mechanical, so synthetic.  It just did not have any "feel right" feel to it.  I was reminded of the machines that churned out soft porn books for the Proles in the Novel "1984".  All done to a formula.

The characters were synthetic.   I was disappointed.  Again, I am sorry to write such a negative assessment, but you are a good writer and ought to work out a better kind of story.

Sorry.

Briar




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