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yAyio6 I really liked your post. Really Great.

It's a shame you have to be so rude, Karen Anne. This story has some flaws but is eminently salvageable.  Can't you phrase your comments in less inflammatory terms?

Ignore the chronic naysayer who says so unfairly this story is not good. It is, and it's one of my favorite recent ones. That does not the issues raised by others aren't valid. They are for the most part very valid. You let the family kind of drop, and the lack of names tends to cause real confusion for the reader.  A bit of of the clothing description would help as well.  You might want to consider reworking this and resubmitting it.  Nothing here is hard to fix.  

First, the story has the 'potential' to be good! It is not.

You need to avail yourself of a good editor! There are typos, mispunctuations etc. The story flows awkwardly.

You bypassed the all important inspection! A great opportunity for telling something important, tossed away.

A T girl story without once describing a scene of what she wore???

The lack of names is strange? The 'Lt.' doesn't begain to establish her character.

Did she shower with her panties and wig on? That scene just is totally implausible.

My advice is this - find and CULTIVATE a good editor as you have potential to write, yet haven't establishe the background to do so.

Ta-ra, fer a bits,
Karen Anne

The good part is -- it's a great story, with a nice twist!
  The bad part is: what about the wife and kids? Second, the use of "it's" in place of "its." I saw a few more errors that could be fixed in editing.
  But, it is readable and enjoyable.
  (Personal: I think the readers who like this are a lot like Linda in that we agree women are just as competent as men in many areas.)

The last I remember about the wife and kids was when he/she called her to say it would be a couple more weeks before he would "be home".  Well, the story went on and on and next trhing we know is six months had passed and he/she was moving on to a new station with the admiral?

I don't think the wife would go for all this.  Or did he shoot her and forgot to tell us about it?

Eve

I enjoy good stories with a military theme, but as already mentioned, What about his family. Seems like another story in the making.

Hi ! Robyn
I enjoyed the story very much. But would like to know how she handled her family.
Hugs, Fran

Great story real fun my dear

Good story, but it ends in the middle.  What about the wife and kids?

a wonderful story that would get more men in the military if things could turn out with such a happy ending.   Maybe in the future you can do a story of what happened next.

I wonder what happened to his wife and what did SHE have to say about all this?????