Dear Jennifer:As one of my most favorite writers you always please. This was a fun piece, a diversion from your usual. But i had just finished "Pump"; and I will take one of these in lieu of that, any day.
That was a cruel strory, unlike any of yours I have read.  But then, I guess you ARE showing your diversity.  Please keep up the good work.

a great story.. wish it were a little longer.. but one thing.. why does it have a rating of X? it could have easily been rated G. anyway keep up the good work. love Kristy.

Well written, very creative idea from one of Story Site's best and most prolific writers.  However, the idea was just sketched out with no real character development. I agree with the other commentators, that this had the potential to be a much better story with more in-depth treatment.

Also, one of my nits about Jennifer's work is that she labels every story "x" rated even if, like this one, it isn't even erotic.  I for one would appreciate more discretion in labeling.  Hey, there are plenty of people who won't read an x rated story and therefore have missed out enjoying many wonderful stories from Jennifer.  

I also would have liked the story to continue to see how Timmy interacted with friends and classmates and how his feminization continued and progressed.

SS

Hello Jennifer,

This is not a short story at all, that is the problem with it. You see, as a series you could do what needs to be done to make this story a real good one.

This reads like an excerpt written for others to buy the book! Giggle, giggle.

Develop the characters in better detail, give them more emotion along with the technical stuff. Include parental involvement as they see the change in attitude and appearence of their children as they get further into the game. Like, they start taking better care of their hair and nails. They begin to dress more feminine and become more involved with their sisters and mothers.

This story could be such a block buster because it has everything a great story needs. Now start with level one and become more descriptive and spell out the lessons learned before they reach the next level.

Huggles
Angel

Not one of your better ones, dear, and I'm a fan.

You know that was a really interesting story. I mean I read stories on here and they're usually fun or sexy, but this was actually interesting. Like a book I might read. I just wish it had been longer, with each section more indepth.