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Very well narrated and very excited to know what was in mother' mind... And what next now... I guess  we will see 2 lesbian couples..
Looking forward to next part as this one was posted 11 years back.. high time ...

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I thoroughly enjoyed the story and look forward to any succeeding storyline.
Well written but easier paragraph spacing would help.
A few grammatical improvements (not that I'm an expert) would make for an even better read.

Hello gentle readers,

 First off I have to thankyou all for reading my stories and offering such great advice.
 Well you all caught me, I am a tyro with writing stories, and I just get an idea and have to run with it before it leaves me, Ya know?

  I do intend to re-do my stories and try to make them easier to read.


               Thanks to all,

                           Hugs & Tickles,

                               Danielle

<<  I had the whole house wired for sound and video so don't even think you can do anything around here and be sure that there are copies of everything that went on here for the last eight months so don't think you can sweet talk your way out of anything!  >>

If he went to the trouble of  having the whole house wired 8 months before the events in the story, he must have suspected something, so he would be reviewing the tapes.  Wouldn't he know all about what was going on?  Does Danielle have a secret agenda?

Wow! A powerful story of deceit.  And how easy to misjudge a character. Daniel turned out to be the heavyweight even if his wife made him light in the loafers.  Poor Rachel.  She was deceived more than either fellow.  I usually think, "All's well that ends well."  But in this case, I am afraid that there is no happy ending.  Everyone loses, except the lawyer.  
  I do hope this was part one of a story.  I would hate to miss "mothers'" insight as to what would happen.
   Thank you for posting this for us to enjoy..

Oh, Danielle! You may have caused my eyes to cross forevermore! Well, you and David and the supporting cast. A little honest effort could have brought forth paragraphs, which are really miraculous little inventions for easing eyestrain. These page-long devils are like being forced to run marathons; you can't stop because you won't easily be able to find your place again.

And in addition, with your work spread out a little --all the better to inspect-- you would, no doubt in all this world, have caught a number of places that you realized stand in need of improvement.