Loved it!

gj32wo Major thankies for the article post.Really looking forward to read more. Awesome.

Wonderful story.I liked a very restrained sex component devoid of any obscenity. I would have liked to read David's feelings.David happens to be a person who impersonated. Can that be a second part of the story?  

Darling,what a lovely ,romantic story .Please write some more .Much love and may God bless you.

what a sweet lovely story.he fell in love with a wonderful loving person.caring and gentle,they are happy together.thank you.

Wonderful warm story. Please feel free to submit more and give us things to look forward to.  Well Done.

I'm still in a lovely tear-filled emotional state. A truly beautiful story. I did note that the narrator changed soon after the story started. However, as the story unfolded, I so, "wrapped up," in the storyline my emotions overflowed. I think I'm still shaking. You created and told the tale so wonderfully. I do hope that you will create more. I'm exhausted.

Love and huggles,

Susan

The story begins in a very confusing manner. We have Douglas
Rivers's thought, that runs on for a very long paragraph, ending
finally with the words, "'personal' time." So the reader thinks
it's a 3rd-person story, apparently about Douglas Rivers. Then the
next paragraph is a 1st-person narrative..."Although Deanna and
I..." Who is that narrator? He has never introduced himself. It
eventually becomes clear that the narrator is Douglas, but that
opening passage needs to be clarified.
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It's perfectly legitimate to switch viewpoints, to be sure, but
it's always a potential source of confusion, & you must make it
clear what you're doing & signal the changes in an unmistakable
manner. "A Better Solution Than Divorce," appearing on Fiction-
mania, switches among 4 or more characters, but it's always clear
who's talking.
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As for the story itself, it's wonderfully sweet & sentimental
story, & a brilliant idea, but somehow unconvincing. Specifically,
it was clear early on what David was up to, but I had trouble
believing he could carry it off in such intimate detail. I'll be
interested to see what other readers have to say.
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--Pervy

Completely compelling!!!

No one hath greater love than in these love stories.  Compelling lesson too, if somehow we can free ourselves from being chained by the artificial boxes of identity we stick ourselves and each other with, the purest of true loves can course through our veins.  Simply magnificent -- so much love in such a short story.  I went through half a box of tissues crying over this one.

I loved spending time with these characters so much that I'd love to see them again.  Yet, at the same time, the story is so perfect and complete, I don't think you should mess with the original story.

Surely, Dee, if you had been Alan Strang's therapist, he would have led a much happier life.

Big Hugs and thanks for making my day!

Love, Sheryl S.