Very good story and has me wanting to read part 2.  Thank you for sharing.

Disgusting and sickly.

 Super story hunny, very nicely told

as per previous comments

Wonderful beginning. Mistress Kate certainly seems to have something in mind for Rachel. I, for one, would certainly enjoy finding out. More please.

Dear Racel
It is really wonderful story. I wish I can contact someone like you to talk about my expeience in Arab country. Please help me and let anyone contact me.

Cecellia

very interesting begining more to follow ? its a good story made better with the descriptions how far will she go

Hey Rachael
Great story although i perfer your Thigh Boots stories much better, out of the two i would carry on writing the Thighboot story.

Keep up the great work.

i enjoyed the story,  it had a better story line than a lot of other stories that CRYSTAL has listed. please continue with this story.
                                 thank you

"" <--- see these things?
They are called quotations.  when a character speaks you put these before and after their words.

This looked like such an enjoyable story, but when every paragraph
turned out to be one long run-on sentence, I simply had to give up.
It was just too hard to read. There's a minimum level of courtesy
which an author owes her readers; that's missing here.
.
--Pervy

I have to agree with Nellie.  Whilst you have an enjoyable concept here, you would really need to use correct punctuation.  The dialogue is spoiled by not being punctuated at all.  I would suggest you go through it again and punctuate the dialogue correctly as it will make it into a better story for all to read.

Love,

Jenny

A fairly decent story but hard to read because of the lack of formatting.