ANHa4Q You ave made some really good points there. I checked on the internet for more information about the issue and found most people will go along with your views on this site.

Very,very bad story!
DISGUSTING!!!!!!!!!

Lovely, absolutely lovely! Brian wasn't humiliated, punished, abused or anything other than himself. Not sure why most of the stories here have to be written like Cross dressing was a taboo, 8th class citizen person.  Keep up the great work!

Loved the story and would like to hear more.
How has life been going, have you been to any class reunions and what did you ware.

Just came across your stories. I see it has been a while since anything was added. Sure hope that you can send more out like these 4 as they are great.

Just came across your story and wanted to thamk you for a sweet and totally convincing one. It is wonderful to read a story that does not have to do with bondage or french maids or some such. Hopefully you will continue Brian's life and we will all get to see how he progresses as a Cheerokee and as a young woman which he in fact is slowly transitioning into. Perhaps in a future chapter he can be seen gaining breasts, hips and such by going on hormones and or an implant surgery.
TA for now, J-Lynn

I finly got caught up with reading the other three chapters. I really like how the story is moving, that Brian is a strong person in this story he know where the center of the earth is. When its time to do a life change he will have many story to tell about his younger life. I want to see how far you can ride the mare down.

C-Monster

A very well written continuation. This story can go virtually forever, or until your fingers wear out. After all, they're only juniors, and there are contests, and away games, and proms, and contest, and homecoming court, and . . .

So far you have developed three adult mentors - his mother (She does have a name besides Mrs. Stev(ph)ens? You put so much into your secondary characters, surely she has a first name); Laurie's mother (surely there's a last name somewhere); and Mrs. Mahan who is somewhat limited by her position, altho she might also be his history teacher. Surely one or more of them will give him pointers, a natural way for his mother to get to know her "daughter," now that the ex has faded from mention.

I hope you have developed a "bible" for this tale. Keeping track of who is what and where and looks how can be cumbersome if you have to keep searching back. Or tracking how a character's appearance evolves over an extended period. For example, Brian's hair should be at least mid-back by now without intervening cuts. With split ends, he would need styling in the worst way. Has Ashley picked up another steady? Does Carol have a boyfriend? Is there more about Marian Bird? Little details that might or not make it into the story but provide depth for the writer.

You have written another episode that moves the story along emotionally very nicely. Congratulations.

Wondeful! You had me reading non-stop! Now only a couple of points. Giggle, giggle.

I love the he's a boy thing BUT! To fit in right he needs to look even more the part. BREASTS! Then he needs a name to be and feel the part as well. Bree-Anne or anything really. Have him ask her what she would have named him if he was born her daughter? Nice touch that...Getting even closer to mom as the daughter she never had? Giggle.

Jezzi I agree with you again! This is scary isn't it? Giggle, giggle.

One flaw and only for you to reach par excellence I mention it here. I quote...

"Okay," said Kelly, "let's do the evening one right now." And she started in with some foundation. While she did my face she talked about cleansers, different kinds of foundations, and a bunch of other stuff I didn't quite follow. The other girls chimed in with suggestions and picked out different eye shadows, mascaras, and so on. It was a Saturday afternoon and a steady stream of shoppers walked past the cosmetics department. I don't think any of them noticed that I was a guy. When Kelly finished she stepped back and said "Voila!" I looked in the mirror on the counter and couldn't believe the transformation. I thought I was too heavily made-up, but Laurie said "Forget it: you look beautiful and you're not taking it off." So I spent the rest of that afternoon in full makeup.

Now here you described Kelly as giving him and showing him two distinctive looks. BUT you left it with him receiving only one look. Giggle, giggle. Very minor flaw, but you are very good and just had to point it out to you.

Now feel free to rip my stories apart with my many flaws. Giggle, giggle.

Jezzi The latest ALEC is up at the BC and also an exclusive at Sapphires. Can't wait to read your comments girl! I am a lot less sensitive than I was before. Giggle, giggle. Teach away oh master instructor!
Huggles
Angel

After part 4
I really liked this episode, no bi-sex or booze.
 
I like the fact that it's simply a public fact that he's a boy.  I really liked his straightforward answer to the jocks' question, why?  "Because i enjoy it."

I would like to see him choose a girl name himself - "Mom, Brian just doesn't sound right among the other girls' names"  Mom:  *Other GIRLS???*

I'd also like to see him with breasts - to just say "The hell with it!" and go for the total girl look.

Smashing!  Another wonderful installment.  I can't wait for more.  I
especially like how there is no pretense about Brian's sex.  It
adds some interesting spice to the normal sweet and sentimental
theme.

Cheers!

I couple days ago I actually started to wonder when the next part of the story would be done. I have to say that the tale gets better with each part and I really enjoyed using my imagination of the main charater through the school to the game.

was re-reading part 3 for the fun of it and it was even better than I originally remembered it.  I love the ideas and the character relationships go. Even with the mom prefer her kid in a skirt than on drugs line.

Tracy, essence is the virtue of one's ownself! To view, reflect and picture our own thought's is, perhaps a gift or at times may well be a curse. You seem to have aquired these in a form that reflects not only whom you are, but perhaps enlighting many as to (as a women) what they may well seek to see. From the earliest moments of chapter 1 to the almost realization of a dream (in chapter 3), the captivation of characters as well as the innerself you portray, viewing the aspects surrounding your character were well matched to how, hmm often(if we're very, very lucky) may occur. For Laurie's flow to enjoin the fabric of you<sigh> into what she requires from her partner/lover/friend more than just a relationship but still you seem to draw the best from your character's(or, perhaps life it's self<giggle>). Really hope you will continue on to the next transition or life for Tracy!.. Chapter 4 is your's girl.. or maybe that may not be your goal? Still the underlaying tones denote a desire to see, hmm how far Laurie(and perhaps Ashley) are will to commit you to themselves<grin>
Very Nice..
Michelle

Great story! A few little quobbles, but nothing to worry about. Keep up the good work--Nocole

[After reading part 3:] This just keeps getting better & better.
You know, there are some authors who just don't know when to quit.
Then there are others who make you wish they'd *never* quit.  You
fall into the latter, blessed, category. I'm getting to know all
those girls & to like them, as if I had lived that whole experience
myself. Whether your story will eventually outlive its welcome, I
don't know, but it certainly hasn't yet! Just one thing...his (her)
mother's reaction on being told was the tiniest surprise in the
story to date. But that's okay, too.
.
--Pervy

Hm...So it was out of a selfish desire that he was first introduced to "the change" and physically feminized?

His mother you now paint as not as caring as we first pictured. If she really did know about everything, why was she so distant about it? Hm?

No breasts? My goodness a sports bra with nothing in it! Giggle, From realistic this story is begining to slip and slip greatly.

Who the hell was the fourth judge? You kept it a secret now tell us please. Bi-sexuality among teen girls is not rare. Most common actually and the first real sexual encounter with girls is over 90% beginning with their fingers. With another person it is with a best friend or sister innocent exploring which often quickly advances to more. I had no problem with the bi-sexuality in this story.

The clubbing and being served alcohol was another matter. NO PLACE would readily serve so obvious teens. Then why would a boy pick a girl with no breasts to dance with at a club? Obcviously he must be gay with a fetish for girly-boys. No, this was a far reach and it did not work.

Get him breasts and get them soon! Without them, he is a girly-boy and a toy to play with. A girly-boy toy! Giggle.

You can fix these things and with a more thorough thinking about the future make this story more realistic and flow as the early chapters have.

Good luck and hope to see you write more.
Angel

The writing is holding up nicely as the water gets gradually deeper. It's nice that each progressive step is reinforced by reward.

There is one quibble: even if this were a college town (make that especially) the carding is non-existant. And I'm not talking fake ID's or having an older friend do the buying, or a couple of places that keep the Alcohol Board investigators well satisfied. It's so wide open MADD would be using the place in fundraisers. For a plot that runs nicely on the cusp of credibility, it sticks out like a sore thumb. At least Brian won't be stuck with the usual fast food summer job - he could get a job behind the bar the way you have him written.

But that's just a quibble. Ah, for the life of the idle rich!

Someone just drop me into the twilight zone. Currently I'm working on a multi-part story myself doing part 2 with the main character attending a private all girls 2 when I thought that maybe Part 3 should be cheerleading camp. Here you go with LIFE AS A DRILL TEAMER PART 3 about that type of subject.  Spooky.

Paula

i'm still enjoying your story. Thanks, Fran

After part 3
I thought you sort of detoured from the realistic with the bi sex stuff, and the heavy drinking and getting served in public.  All that sounded more like they were in college at least.  Mom better worry; he IS doing drugs, it's just that the drug is alcohol.  I again liked the hair and added nail sessions, though I still would like a real full spa day makeover and perm (explanation to Chris: to save time) salon scene.  
How about some conflict with dad who is supposedly seeing him every other weekend?  what's been his reaction to his son's slow feminization?  What will he say about chris becoming a full fledged Cherokee?

Hi Tracy,
        really interesting story, I have been thinking about my own schooldays and wondering what if my own trans self had met nurturing gg. Ah well it never happened but your story is delightful for exploring what might have been's. A different culture a different age but there is an underlying positive hope in your tale.
Thank You for this Story,
Huggles, Chris.

Found myself getting a bit  board with the start of part 3 but the middle and ending really was wonderful dear.

You are a great talent. I agree with Jezzi, your story is very realistic, but I find the mother part puzzling. Was she the fourth judge? I bet she was.

Mothers seem to me (especially the caring loving kind) to have an extra depth and sense when it come to their children. Especially so with an only child. You mentioned the father was able to see him every other weekend, but not one word in your story so far about dad.

I love your style of writing! The feelings you give each charecter sets you apart from many writers that post here. Thanks for the lesson! Giggle

Huggles
Angel

Thank you Tracy for a great story, please continue.  :)

A very nice continuation. Even your  minor characters have a bit of depth, as in the shy nervous girl also trying out. Keep up the good work.

Part 2 just proves this story will end up getting better and better

(after part 2)
    This just keeps getting better, and I think it's because you're writing this very realisticly.  I can actually see this happening in RL.   For example, you don't have him in a dress for the feathering banquet, but we can see this coming as the feminization has advanced.  my guess would be makeup as a normal part of his routine next.  Breasts'll be the big hurdle, though.  
     I like it that everyone knows; when I first dressed, I made sure all my friends, colleagues etc. knew.  No closet for me!  And none for Brian; he's mostly proud of what he's doing.  
     I love the details, too, like the hint of sadness from his mom when he couldn't bring himself to tell her.  however, his denial is pretty realistic; if his mom is setting his hair, it's pretty obvious to all (other characters and readers) but him that she knows, but he's scared.  It's obvious his mom's opinion means a lot to him.    
     I didn't like the beer for high school kids, but, unfortunately, that's realistic, too, and at least it's not drugs.  
     I'm still waiting (hoping) for a really detailed salon scene - maybe the Cherokee's have to go to a multi-school formal banquet where gowns are required and "she" has to go the whole nine yards for the honor of the school???  
     Keep up the good work!

Part two went well.  I am enjoying how you are getting into the hero/ines head.  Keep up the good work

Part two keeps to the same high standards as part one. Loved the continued "product placement" of the Keds. The pacing is great- you can see the tension building as Brian is being ever-so slowly feminized- but willingly. One minor quibble- the punctuation is a little erratic at times- and can be distracting. A little more editing should take care of that, though. Really looking forward to part three.

Part 2 only makes me more anxious for Part 3!

I love this story. It's fun, kind, funny, gentle, and clear that Brian's undergoing a remarkable and enjoyable metamorphosis.  Don't leave us hanging! The sequel is one I can't wait for!!

Good Stuff!
Keep it coming Tracy. This looks like an unrushed story with lots of entertainment. Thanks   Another Brian

Tracy,

A great start to your story.  I can't wait for the next chapter.  Thanx...

Mary

A wonderful story of love and feminization: slow, steady, and voluntary.  And I loved the hair scenes.  I hope you work in a salon hair/makeover visit in a future chapter.  Bravo!

Tracy,

This is a wonderful first chapter of a story. You write beautifully. I can't wait for the next chapters to come.

Broni

Very well-written. I liked the slow pace of the gradual (and unforced) femming process. The frequent references to Keds were a definite plus. Keds- especily white canvas- are a turnon for me as well, and it was welcome for them to have such a prominent place in the story. Hope the remaining chapters are of the same high quality.

Very nicely written - literate, well paced, a nice balance of emotional and physical descriptions. Plenty of promise to continue the story, expanding the cast and touching on lots of school and maturing situations. It will be interesting to see what you do with these characters.

I can only concur with all the others.  This is the beginning of a
terrific story.  The premise is nothing new...we've had plenty of
stories about boys dressing up on some pretext or other...but what
counts is not how new toe plot is, but what you do with it.  Here,
the warmth of feeling, and the appealing characters, make this
something special.

--Pervy

Tracy, even though there was Hallowe'en mentioned in this chapyer, this was not a Hallowe'en story, but a story of love, self-discovery, support and friendship. Looking forward to the next chapter in this intriguing story.

Barbara Lynn Terry

The word wonderful doesn't come close to how good it is.  Thanks for a wonderfullly early Halloween tale.

Superb.  No more need be said, except to ask that you NOT make this your last one.