Cute story, but very hard to read.  Spelling, grammar, time tensing all need work.

Hot damn, loonkig pretty useful buddy.

Beautiful, beautiful and beautiful, is all I have to say.
Kisses.
Silvia.

WHEN GOT NEW STORY?

This story obviously needs a followup but please take the previous comments into consideration.
There are so many elementary grammatical and spelling error that it makes reading a lot of hard work.
The story plot line is fine though.

As a Pom, I find that many US writers (not only yourself and not just on TG sites I hasten to add) have real problems with some or all of the following
- your instead of your'e
- their and there confusion
- marking pauses in dialogue just like in real life.
- simple continuity errors. Jumping from one place to another without a break or a single sentence setting the context for the next scene.
In this story, when the two went to buy the breast forms, what sort of shop did they go into? Who was serving them? etc etc.

You really must to an editor to help you with your dialogue and overall story. IF you don't, write the story, put it in a drawer for a month or two and then read it again as if you were coming to it for the first time.
I suffer from Dslyexia and I was as even worse than you before I got an editor and also attended some creative writing classes. I was nearly 18 before I could spell "being" correctly so all is not too bad! Now I have a PHD in Control Engineering so take heart from my comments.

You really should pay closer attention to the mechanics of writing. You have a ton of run-on sentences and missing or incorrect punctuation. If your current editor doesn't have a spell checker, get an editor that does.  Convention says you should have only one person's dialog per paragraph.  Trying to wade through poorly constructed sentences greatly detracts from the story you're trying to tell.

Melanie