Nice story but when r going to start part two I love read it please make it soon k <3sweet

you r ok being called a sl**t and mabey Rosie will take the butt plug out and be nicer. i hate being bossed by my gf and she nows it standd up for your self dude. me my gf hang out all the time and we treat eachother with respect i stand up for she do the same

This story infuriated me! When the word divorce is used in a marriage that marriage is in trouble. Likewise, when the phrase 'disown you' is used... you have sent a quake through the family construct. Furthermore, it is the same old tired bigotry being male is wrong. This story has the female committing crimes many times more aggregious than that infraction for which he is being punished. And still... the author has all things just peachy keen and rosey at the end. The true criminals get away with their crimes. I love a good story but unassailed injustice masks any enjoyment for me. Maybe I have to learn to read these stories without personalizing them? Without putting myself in the scene? Without relating to any of the characters?

Oh yeah, fbaulous stuff there you!

I'm sorry, I could not get past the first few sentences.  Please pick up a copy of,say Strunk & White, or any of the myriad of writing style books on the market.  In them, you will learn of these wonderful things called commas, and periods, and all sorts of wonderful punctuation marks!  You will actually learn how to write a readable story.

Do the ends justify the means? Apparantly so. I think that the family should've been more startled about the death of a family member. Because, essentially, their son/brother died, and was replaced by a girl. Yes they have a new child, but they have still orchestrated the passing of one of their family members. I think you need to focus on that.

I'm sorry but this was not well written.
It also had a very twisted plot with a incredibly abusive family.

All in all.
A sad piece.

 Liked the story got me hot! I just wished the girl's would have made him wear a thong! See how he likes it! Also liked his first encounter with Rosie in the stall. Please finish and have our "little girl" be deflowered by a cute boy!

the stories are getting better and also the spelling&grammer well done keep improving

    For pity's sake, please, please, please learn to spell, and how to write conversation.  It goes something like this:  "Put those girl clothes on, now, young man," Mom said in a stern voice, "If you aren't in panties and a dress in 2 minutes, you will get a spanking."  I knew Mom meant it this time.   I whispered a quiet, "Yes Mother."
    You see how the words of the conversation are set apart from the narration, or what the character is thinking?
    Keep going, but learn to actually write a story, not just come up with sexy ideas and slam them down on "paper."

good story
can't wait for the next part of it

Great story! Keep up the good work!