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The Neighbor
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Donny on 11/18/16
A lovely story.  Liked it a lot.  Don

Comment by Leah on 01/07/06
Jennifer, you've been pounding that keyboard really diligently for three or four years by now, and this story gives clear evidence that it may be time for rest and reflection. Your command of the language is perhaps even stronger than in your earliest stories here at Crystal's site. However,....

I'm not a literary critic, so I've not undertaken to read all 273 stories so I would have ample grounds for complete comparison, but *The Neighbor* is written in such a formulaic style it surely is a candidate for being machine-written. (Are you holding out on us?)

No twist to leave the reader smiling in admiration, almost no inner life to help explain events both present and future, and so on. TeeVee script for *Without a Trace* or *Outer Limits*?

Comment by steve on 01/03/06
i loved the story.. the clean clear writing... and the power of the imagery..wonderfullly erotic.
Steve



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