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Neighbours
by Sarah Bayen

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Comment by Laurie on 03/08/14
I get it!!, Its another very good story.. I wish you would go back to writing,, You are very good at it!!

definitely a Fan,

Laurie


Comment by Silvia. on 06/17/12
Sickly, disgusting, ridiculous, horrible, revolting, etc...

Comment by Trying to understand on 02/06/09
revolting!  Unplesant!  So much so, I quit reading.  It is plain to see that the author hates men and boys.  No value to this story at all and all those who think it was good.....should rethink their decision.  Of course, if you are of that unplesant nature of hating men and boys and taking advantage of a small child then I feel sorry for you too!  This does not help me to understand the transgendered, cross-dressing society at all.  It just shows perversion!!!!!

Comment by Trying to understand on 02/06/09
revolting!  Unplesant!  So much so, I quit reading.  It is plain to see that the author hates men and boys.  No value to this story at all and all those who think it was good.....should rethink their decision.  Of course, if you are of that unplesant nature of hating men and boys and taking advantage of a small child this I feel sorry for you too!  This does not help me to understand the transgendered, cross-dressing society at all.  It just shows perversion!!!!!

Comment by joanne50 on 12/24/05
Charlotte
are you going to come back to this story and continue this story.i would like to see what katy thinks about how charlotte has evolved and the effects of charlotte on jen.to me that would be a good ending place but i am not the writer.

Comment by Angel O'Hare on 11/12/04
Another winner by the wonderful author Sarah Bayen! Congratulations Sweetie on another great story!

Huggles
Angel

Comment by Sissy Baby Paula on 08/05/04
A well balanced story. I really loved the bits about John/Charlotte shooting "love me" arrows with his/her eyes. And the ending hinted nicely about teenage love - perhaps lesbian love but perhaps not...

Great writing!

Hugs from Sissy Baby Paula and Snowball (my toy puppy)

Comment by Jimmy on 08/04/04
Very well done.  With a delightful ending.

Comment by Pippa K. on 07/30/04
Oooo...  Chills down the spine...  Let me agree with Ms. Davies: crafty, indeed!  One of my favorite H.P. Lovecraft stories was from the point of view of a monster, who couldn't quite grasp its situation, nor could we until the end, when the first-person narrator was shocked to discover its own nature.  Sarah Bayen has written a tale both more subtle and more complex, but with an even bigger payoff imho.  Great fun!

Comment by Samanta Michelle Davies on 07/30/04
Sarah,
You are certainly a very crafty devil. I loved it. Nice twist at the end. We don't see enough stories like yours.

Samantha

Comment by jami on 07/29/04
You  did it again, girl! Another truly outstanding story. I can't wait for your next one.
Hugs,
Jami

Comment by Jane Hudson on 07/28/04
Loved it.Sweet boy feminine yet with under it all a inner strength. Macho dont always win the girls heart

Comment by Kristi Fitzpatrick on 07/27/04
Dear Sarah:

   You are most certainly one of the most accomplished writers on this site. I am enjoying this story though I wasn't at all sure I would be interested in the topic. I just started reading it because you wrote it Sarah.

    Your understanding of young people and relationship conflicts and power exchange as well as gender confusion in so full and forceful that you almost blow us away as we read. But don't worry we can take it. Also, there are few authors that I anticipate the next episode as much as you. This story is not only penetrating and insightful but just good plain fun. More please.

Hugs,

Kristi  

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 07/27/04
after part 6
PERFECT!!!  I wondered how you'd finish up in so short a space and you did it just right.  Another fantastic job of writing.  You go, writer girl!

Comment by Annabel on 07/24/04
(After part 5)
I love Sarah's style of writing and the plot in this story is excellent.  I especially enjoy the way the tension builds in the  inter-relationship between Jen and Charlotte.
Looking forward to part 6.  With characters as strong and well-crafted as these, it's a pity this will be the end of the story.
Maybe just the end of the first story?

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 07/20/04
After part 4

WOW!  Talk about a love/hate relationship.  Can't wait for the rest.  However is this going to finish in only two more parts ??

Comment by Pippa K. on 07/15/04
It's really fun to see a story told from a less common angle.  In this case, the first person narrator is the nominally malevolent character in our little transformation story.  Makes it interesting, doesn't it?  And, there's lots of conflict, tension, and untold backstories to our little players, too.  Can't wait to see it develop!  This IS fun!

Comment by fregen on 07/15/04
It's always a pleasure to read Sarah's well crafted stories.  Looks like another great series.  Thanks, Sarah!

Comment by Jezzi Stewart on 07/13/04
Looks like another good one!  Congrats, Sarah

Comment by Samantha Michelle on 07/13/04
Well Sarah, (To borrow a quote) "This is another fine mess you have got me into" said Charlotte/John...
This has the making of another great yarn. More like this please.



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