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The New Air Hostess
by Chloe Delgado

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Comment by Aleesha on 07/23/10

Well done for trying, the story was good but I agree with the other contributors.

Comment by Bobbie on 07/26/04

Could be very interesting, Yes you have some minor spelling and grammer errors but quite good compared with others.
Keep up the good work and proceed with all due speed.

Comment by leah on 07/25/04

Quick, we need an editor before part 02 makes its appearance. I'm in a hurry, Chloe, only because you as a writer seem to be in too big a hurry to get your thoughts on paper (or electrons onto the screen) to do an adequate job at getting those thoughts across to other people. -- This is intended for our enjoyment, is it not?

No one is perfect, but 8-10 spelling, grammatical and bad word usage errors in the first real paragraph is definitely noticeable. The thing I truly love about computers is the ease in which you can revise. -- Yeah, yeah, it can be a pain, but it can also result in a finished product of which you can be rightfully proud.

Comment by Paula on 07/23/04

seem more SRS than magic transformation as marked and it was a bit confusing time line

Comment by Dillon Doe on 07/23/04

This story has promise..

few spelling errors... but the major problem i had was with the narrative and the timeline shifts.. none of which when together made sense.

I think this needs a little reworking..

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