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The New Game: A New Player
by Patricia Pendragon

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Comment by Ravi on 03/12/14
Great story, You're incredible! You are
the first writer who writes about a bad
girl and her punishment.
In all stories the boys always are bad
and are punished.
Finally you wrote about bad girls and her punishment.
You're a fair person!
Kisses and hugs.

Comment by Silvia    (from Brazil) on 02/07/10
Great story, You're incredible! You are the first writer who writes about a bad girl and her punishment.
In all stories the boys always are bad and are punished.
Finally you wrote about bad girls and her punishment.
You're a fair person!
Kisses and hugs.
Silvia.

Comment by Mr Man on 01/29/01
This was another well written and interesting tale. I look forward to reading about the adventures of the next person to play the game. Good job and thanks for writing!

Comment by Paula Jutras on 01/28/01
I prefer M2F rather than F2M changes but still a very good story. I like the monitor screen list of choices and how the story turned out nicely.

Comment by Nellie D on 01/24/01
A very good short story of an obnoxious young woman who tries the Game and looses. She doesn't take the lose very well. The twist at the end is delightful. The detail is good and stroryline easy to follow.

Good job Patricia



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