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New Girl on the Block
by Jennifer White

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Comment by Aleesha on 05/31/10
I loved your story because it was different. Thanks.
Comment by Paula on 05/31/09
Hi, I started reading this story thinking it was another run of the mill trasnformation story however it was not. This was agreat story, full of beauty and hope. Thank you for writing it
Comment by shalimar on 05/31/07
What Caveman wrote, "Great story please continue it" is the problem with most of your stories.  This, like most of your others, is just transformation story.  What happens to the new girl is more important because the transformation and how it is done is just a plot device.  Please consider writing a complete story.

hugs

Shelly aka shalimar

Comment by Will It Work on 07/08/05
Simple and to the point... I kind of like the idea of the girl "taking her life back" since the case can be made that no one was really hurt by this.

It might have been nice to have a "how do the people around the house react" epilogue, but it's been heavily used.
Comment by julie on 09/20/03
story a bit heavy but it grew on me more please i would have liked to see a bit more of the story and delve into it more deeply
Comment by julie on 09/20/03
excelllent story a bit heavy but it grew on me more please
Comment by Caveman on 06/01/03
Great STory please contniue it
Comment by Paula on 06/01/03
(spoiler don't read review if you haven't read story)

up to the ending I loved the story. If not for the mind being crush and all rather than the classic become a passenger in own body


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