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A New Knight - The Soul Mates
by Robert the Horseman

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Comment by Silvia. on 03/26/12
Why do not you end this story?
Comment by Larry on 11/19/11
like the story....shame that i t looks lik the author will never finish it..
Comment by Eleanor on 03/23/05
Well done Horseman,
                  A good story with great potential for development.
Keep up the good work, reading your story so far was a real treat.
Comment by Aardvark on 05/08/03
Great first story, Horseman.

Your description is excellent. The story has wonderful potential. The sentence structure can certainly be improved. Fortunately, that is a part that can be worked out with practice. The idea for the story, the storytelling, the characterization and the beginnings of a plot; these vital things you already have.

Well done.
Comment by Misty Dawn on 05/08/03
Robert,

This is a wonderful first effort.   It i lively, well fleshed and detailed.  You have the beginnings of a great epic.  With a bit of research and character defination it could go on for a long time. I for one am proud to give my stamp of approval.  Thank you for some delightful entertainment.

Misty
Comment by Mr. Man on 05/07/03
Hi Horseman! I really enjoyed your story, and think you have created a wonderful setup for further adventures. My only complaint is that there isn't more to read. Pleas hurry with more. I look forward to reading more of your work.

-Mr. Man
Comment by Maggie Finson on 05/05/03

Robert,

    As has already been said, nice work!  I like the 'soulmate' concept and you got it down and understandable very well.  I'm caught, I'll admit it.  Waiting for the next installment.

Good Effort on a first story.

Maggie
Comment by Prudence Walker on 05/05/03
Well done Horseman. its better than the first copy you sent me. Bravo... I will be anxious to see more of the story. a great start and you show promise of many more storys in the future. keep up the great work. huggles from prue
Comment by Rebecca anne Stewart on 05/04/03
   Well done Robert.  I knew you could do it.  
I can't wait to read the next part.  I hope it isn't long incoming, but I will bide my time in wait until you are sure that it is exactly what you wish to say.
   Keep up the good work.
                          Sincerely:Becky
Comment by Marrissa James on 05/04/03
    I do like your style. please keep writing and good luck. Bravo!


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