ENJOYALBLE STORY AND GREAT ENDING.

I enjoyed the lovely, little story. Transformations are always nicer when wanted, rather than forced.

However, the writer should have used either MS-Grammar check or read the story a week later, before submitting it. The words seemed to run into each other, which made the reading of it more of a chore. The noun-verb tense did not alway agree with each other.

The story's idea is nice and refreshing.

Susan

I didn't get very far into the story yet, I was jarred out of the mood in the first couple of paragraphs where the author didn't seem to even know what color hair her charactor has.

"June awoke at the sound of the alarm clock. She was not a small woman Six-foot size 16 but she wore it well her dark brown hair falling in soft waves to her shoulder. The start to another day, for it was another wonderful day. She leaped out of her bed in her small but feminine one bed flat in Bristol. She had her shower shaved all over. Then she went and put on her make up then brush out her blond shoulder length hair."

I seldom leave a review but this story was sweet, kind and gentle.  Also, I am one of those who enjoy reading about bosses becoming feminized secretaries, losing their power and so on.  It's usually a blackmail or fem-dom type piece, but I've always wanted to see one where the male WANTS to become a secretary, is HAPPY to give up the power and ENJOYS her new role and of course, the skirt suits and dresses.  This is a lot more believable than the tired old "male maid" business.  I hope to see more stories of this type from you, with different angles.

Such a gentle piece.  Just a small glimse into the lives of others.  I'm so glad you're continuing to write - I've always enjoyed the way you put your special insights onto paper.  Thank you for sharing your story.

I found this a heartwarming piece.  Some of the criticisms about proofing are valid, but it didn't detract from my enjoyment.  It almost would have been nice if June would have eventually found someone herself, maybe one of the factory workers or foremen, but she's obviously happy as she is.  Thank you.

a sweet wonderful story and would love to see more of this style of work from you.

This is a wonderful, wonderful story.  I would have liked to have seen more about the decision between husband and wife to reverse and how that came about.  That seemed a bit too abbreviated.  Otherwise, I did notice the typos and punctuation problems. These cuold be easily fixed.

This is a wonderful, heartwarming story without the usual femdom overtones.  But I must say, Jane, it's in desperate need of some proofreading.  It almost reads like a first draft.  No commas or any other punctuation except periods.  Misspellings galore.  Also, in the beginning, you say June has blonde hair, and brown hair in the same graph.  Which is it?  Some words that are singular are clearly meant to be plural.  It doesn't make it any less a great story but reading it is a bit of rough going.  You might want to fix it up a bit.  It wouldn't take that long.

Short but sweet and beautifully told! Wish it was me!