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Comment by DEE on 10/06/07
ENJOYALBLE STORY AND GREAT ENDING.
Comment by Susan Pauline Bauer on 05/04/04
I enjoyed the lovely, little story. Transformations are always nicer when wanted, rather than forced.
Comment by Nora Adrienne on 01/14/03
I didn't get very far into the story yet, I was jarred out of the mood in the first couple of paragraphs where the author didn't seem to even know what color hair her charactor has.
Comment by Ardie on 01/13/03
I seldom leave a review but this story was sweet, kind and gentle. Also, I am one of those who enjoy reading about bosses becoming feminized secretaries, losing their power and so on. It's usually a blackmail or fem-dom type piece, but I've always wanted to see one where the male WANTS to become a secretary, is HAPPY to give up the power and ENJOYS her new role and of course, the skirt suits and dresses. This is a lot more believable than the tired old "male maid" business. I hope to see more stories of this type from you, with different angles.
Comment by Dave H on 01/13/03
Such a gentle piece. Just a small glimse into the lives of others. I'm so glad you're continuing to write - I've always enjoyed the way you put your special insights onto paper. Thank you for sharing your story.
Comment by Supey on 01/12/03
I found this a heartwarming piece. Some of the criticisms about proofing are valid, but it didn't detract from my enjoyment. It almost would have been nice if June would have eventually found someone herself, maybe one of the factory workers or foremen, but she's obviously happy as she is. Thank you.
Comment by Paula Jutras on 01/12/03
a sweet wonderful story and would love to see more of this style of work from you.
Comment by GFriday on 01/12/03
This is a wonderful, wonderful story. I would have liked to have seen more about the decision between husband and wife to reverse and how that came about. That seemed a bit too abbreviated. Otherwise, I did notice the typos and punctuation problems. These cuold be easily fixed.
Comment by Doyanne on 01/12/03
This is a wonderful, heartwarming story without the usual femdom overtones. But I must say, Jane, it's in desperate need of some proofreading. It almost reads like a first draft. No commas or any other punctuation except periods. Misspellings galore. Also, in the beginning, you say June has blonde hair, and brown hair in the same graph. Which is it? Some words that are singular are clearly meant to be plural. It doesn't make it any less a great story but reading it is a bit of rough going. You might want to fix it up a bit. It wouldn't take that long.
Comment by Axanar on 01/11/03
Short but sweet and beautifully told! Wish it was me!
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