Could  you write a "prequel" telling us what Peter did to be sent to this school and how he gradually got used to being Petra.

Huggles Jane

Thank you so much for the wonderful offering.  You write with great passion.   I could feel Petra's emotions same as if I were her, of course i guess in reality I am (giggle)

I had empathy too for the parents, as they struggled with not only their son to daughters change but having seen she found paradise, how where they going to keep her there?

I look forward to reading more, thank you again, Maggie

I really enjoyed the story. I was going to comment widely on the grammer, punctuation and sentence structure but the good people before me did well at that. The only thing that could have made the story better is mentioned above.

Jane tries so hard with her stories and its a shame she doesnt have the good command of English she needs.

Cute and loving story.  I did find it hard to read.  Jezzi pointed out one problem, but there are many writing errors that need to be addressed.  Pick up a copy of "Harbrace College Handbook."  You can find older used editions for just a few quid.  And I know that my writing "sucks" as well.  :-).  I should spend some time with the "Handbook" as well.

yet another sweet and heart warming tale that is wonderful to read dear. These stories are for fun and grammer isn't everything if it's read able and enjoyable.

Just a note that when writing dialog, every time the peaker changes, there is a new paragraph:

<<Ms Underwood spoke to the couple in front of her. " Some people seem to think we are here to punish the boy's sent to us but that is wrong" Dave, Peters dad said but we was told that was part of what happened here. " Oh no the boy's who come here are very carefully selected to see if they are suitable for this school" June his mum said " What is to become of my Peter the tears welling up inside of her" ...  >>

Paragraphs should either be separated by a blank line or the first line of the paragraph should be indented:

                                              EITHER

Ms Underwood spoke to the couple in front of her. " Some people seem to think we are here to punish the boy's sent to us but that is wrong"

Dave, Peters dad said "but we was told that was part of what happened here.

" Oh no the boy's who come here are very carefully selected to see if they are suitable for this school"

June his mum said " What is to become of my Peter the tears welling up inside of her" ...

                                                       OR

       Ms Underwood spoke to the couple in front of her. " Some people seem to think we are here to punish the boy's sent to us but that is wrong"
       Dave, Peters dad said but we was told that was part of what happened here.
       " Oh no the boy's who come here are very carefully selected to see if they are suitable for this school"
       June his mum said " What is to become of my Peter the tears welling up inside of her" ...