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Wonderful way for 'things' to happen, I loved how seriously Janet approached her waitress position, Shelly I'm sure was surprised to see the generous amount of tip money from Janet's efforts to cover for her.  We all know that took some serious effort, much more than the conditions of the bet they made.  Janet's mother became a key person early in this story when she insisted the "clown" look would make things embarrassing while being serious about Janet's presentation would make things much easier for her perhaps, even enjoyable.  At the restaurant, can you just imagine the owners reaction if Shelly's stand in looked and acted like a man in drag?  That would have been instant disaster for everyone involved!  I commend Janet for her efforts to keep everyone pleased even before she herself knew it was meant to be for her, father had to suppress a few well deserved rages but lets try to see from his position,  his son dissolved right in front of his own eyes.  Than in hardly more than a blink of his eyes stands a beautiful teenage daughter.  I must give father due credit for not throwing a rage and saying "no, stop, quit, it's over this moment!"

9TUbw1 Author, Shoot yourself a knee..!!

WOW are you a good writer.
This is the first story I've read, and I can hardly wait to read some more.

You're a pro.

Great story girl. Janet [male name not given] loses a bet and now must become a waitress and attend school as a girl. She likes being a girl and gets what she needs to become a girl. =Too bad her friend Greg won't be a friend anymore. But Stan becomes her boyfriend and the girls accept her in their ranks. Poor daddy can't really accept Janet. Part 2 needed to show Janet becoming a girl and Daddy accepting his new daughter.

As an editor, I am extremely suprised and delighted by your skill. Keep up the good work--and feel free, though not mandated to diversify.

Several very interesting hints mad me take notice, and I highlighted them for later use, then I started to get ready for my very first date.

mad-->made

you should make the characters deeper. Interview them. Get inside their head. Not just your protagonist, but the other girls.

also, what did the kiss feel like?

It is a favorite topic of my poetry club.

Good Luck,
Samuel Morris Katz