That's a very bad story, really bad.
I didn't like.
Silvia.

as per previous comments

i thought it was a good story but to short a saequel would be better if you could think of one good story more please

i liked the story but again iwish it was far longer any thoughts about a sequel well worth it

It's an excellent story

I kind of wish it had a sequel though, as he is still in uniform and makeup, and she can't very well drive him home yet (she has to get right to the hospital)

I'm glad you liked my little story, though I agree the content is quite mild for the categories used (hence the "M" rating).

I thought I would write something gentle and amusing to offset the heavy duty content of Josephine (which does much to deserve its "X").  Maybe I'm better at the light hearted things.

Miss A

Very well-written story, especially for only a 4th submission.  My only complaint is the many colloquialisms used, but that's to be expected from an international forum.

One other suggestion, along the lines of Patricia's comments, the categories indeed are formidable, and perhaps not quite appropriate to this story.  It was barely femdom/authoritarion since there was very little in the way of coercion or force, unless you are planning on making the women a little more controlling in the next chapter (hopefully).  Also, handcuffs are very mild bondage if anything (at least to those of us into bondage), and seem to be sort of incidental anyway.  The bondage category is for stories whose MAIN theme is bondage, so I would lose "bondage" as a category and just leave it as a keyword.

But otherwise, keep up the good work.  Another budding great author in the makings here.

Hugs,
-Ami

Nice little story.  It had all the right components to make it interesting and an enjoyable read.  

The only thing I would have added would be a bit of irony at the end where the protagonist learned that they knew all along where the key was in the original flat.

Something on the order of, "Well now, you've been a good sport.  Come round again sometime, and maybe now you've been out we won't have to pretend to lose the key to get you outside next time."


;o)

Patricia

These categories look pretty formidable: Bondage, Crossdressing/TV, Deals Bets or Dares, Femdom/Authoritarian.

But the way Miss A. weaves the elements together is not only realistic, but it makes for an enjoyable, plausible "slice of life." Wonder if the Narrator shows up at that bar again in a week or two for further exploration?

     leah

A delightful li'l read with a good sense of the scene. I became absorbed and could imagine the accents of all the gels involved.
Jolly good show!

Ta-ra, fer a bits,
Karen Anne