JfobQw some  truly   excellent   content  on this  site, thanks  for contribution.

The use of periods would be very helpful.

ohOPDq Wow, great post.Thanks Again. Really Great.

B9AJtq Looking forward to reading more. Great post.Really thank you!

Very good job.
He deserved what she did with him.
He is a bad husband.
Silvia.

Story  40%  Typing   50%    Spelling and English    40%    Should have stayed at college

Well done effort by Mistress Janet to humiliate and punish a wayward and very deserving hubby -- and make a financial prifit to boot. Of course, also well thought out that little hubby can serve as maid to Mistress Janet when not busy in her new career as Friday night slut.

the story is interesting revenge is sweet but the spelling etc was very poor

That you tried to write a story should be seen as commendable, but you do need to learn some basic grammar, sentence construction, and how to spell or use the spell check on your computer.

It's hard to start to critique a story that is limited to one, very long, run-on sentence with numerous misspelled words.  I see the "constructive criticism" from other respondents, above, but, quite frankly, how many people got to the first line, rolled their eyes, and left the story immediately to find one of the many well-crafted stories at this site.  Why should I or anyone else read a story that is a concoction of unnecessarily bad spelling, sterile monotone prose, and no punctuation?  

Writing is work.  This author either needs to get serious and apply what she/he learned in grade school grammar or take a course in basic literacy or find another way to kill his/her free time.  

the story was intresting but to short a lot more detail would have been better

great story pity it was so short a wifes revenge well done more please

Love the story, it's my ultimate fantasy. Why are all your stories so short, you have great story lines, please try to expand on them. XOXOX Sissi Riki

a sweet revenge story excellent what more can one say well written
part 2 should be interesting you can go far with this story

I loved your story,please keep on with the story.Chaper 2 and more.Love from a cd

Dear Sally,

I liked the story line and I agree with the previous comments about a more sensual description of the events. The mere event of being presented with a maid's uniform could have been fully detailed. Not merely describing the outfit in sensual detail but each person's reactions to each part of the uniform as it was presented. The mere physcial actions described are really immaterial to what is going on through each person's mind. Your potential is very good. However, you've got to use sentence structure. After I write something and think it's good, I re-look at it about two weeks later and read it as it was new to me. I change phrases; if I use a quote, I start a new paragraph; I add more detail.

Why not take the scene, that ended your story, and take it further. Perhaps this woman is so angry, that she wants to feminize her husband and he might even like his maid's role!

Think of the possibilities!

Susan Ann-Pauline

I like the plot of your story.  Although this storyline has been done many times, I never get tired of it.  I think you have potential to be a good author, but there are a few things you need to work on.

First of all, don't be afraid to ask an editor to check your work.  There are many volunteer editors here that will not only help you with your grammer and punctuation, but will also give you some ideas on how to fill out your story, which brings us to the second point: The details of the story are what makes a story unique, and your story needs much more detail.  

You need to bring the reader into the scene by describing everything - even things you think aren't important - they may be important to your reader.  I was a bit disappointed when I was told it was "32 guys later..." or whatever, and you hadn't described a single encounter in detail.  Granted, you probably wouldn't want to describe all 32 (unless you can think of 32 very unique scenarios), but a few detailed descriptions would have been helpful in making the story more realistic.

Overall, a decent first effort.  My criticism is only intended to help, so I hope you don't take offense.  I would like to see you continue writing.