this story seems very real, I could totally see it going on in a real-life situation. The search for the TS made me feel bad for the poor girl, no tgirl wants herself to be ousted.

The biggest reason it seemed real to me was the girl's motivation: curiosity. What a selfish reason to single someone out!

anyways, I loved the story, thanks for writing! ^^

I used a phrase "She can not confirm nor deny"  it is amzing that somepeople do not think outside the box.  If I know something that you do not need to know I would tell you
I can not confirm nor deny" that means that you do not need to know, thank you
Jill

Take no heed to some of those who read and then criticize, If they    are reading and making such comments, then perhaps they should submit stories for others to read. I used to write but got tired of people always finding flaws in my writing. Criticism is just that criticism, nothing more nothing less. It is neither constructive nor destructive, it is criticism and it is menat to be mean. Sweetie I am sure you submitted these without an outside reader. I have seen nothing since from you and I would not be surprised to see you quit writing. You have good ideas and they are certainly ideas thought out. I for one like what you write. I get the gist of the story and I enjoy reading them. I ask that you continue and not leave us that enjoy reading your stories short changed.

Please, oh please, oh please.
Take the time to re-read and edit your stories before posting them. Better yet, have a friend look them over first. We tend to see what we meant to write rather than what we actually wrote. If someone else looks at it, she is more likely to find errors.

This story was too full of mistakes. Here are a few examples:

Content doesn't make sense:
You write "I told them that under company policy I could not deny nor confirm there was a guy working for the company as a woman. Did I know? I knew exactly who the person was and I was not going to tell anyone."
If she cannot deny nor confirm the situation, why does she go on to say she knows who the person is. By saying that, she confirms that there is a MTF employee.


Grammar problem:
"I asked her to tell whoever was feeding her that stuff certainly must be jealous I looked at her and in a stern voice I told her that those who accuse usually are guilty themselves."
Read that sentence out loud and you should see two ways it is incorrect. It should be something like "I said that whoever was feeding her that stuff certainly must be jealous. I looked at her, and in a stern voice I told her that those who accuse usually are guilty themselves."


Spelling error:
Patsy's name is spelled Pasty at least once.


I am not trying to criticize rudely. I hope you take this as the constructive criticism it is meant to be.

You get a lot of humanity into an amazingly low word count.  This is a true gem.  It is sensitive, internally consitent, visual, warm, and winning.  Congratulations to a true winner!

Hugs & Kisses,
Sheryl

What a great short story. An original approach well disguised but certainly entertaining to read. I like your style and look forward to more work from you. This is one of those TG stories that could have been expanded but stands quite well on its own. Thanks for your effort. Another Brian

My dear

Great story Iam a TS working with women they know but to them at lest to my face Iam just one of the girls they are a great bunch