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Hi, it's a good story, but I never would forgive my mother and my sisters by what they did to me.
Hugs.
Silvia.

Well I enjoyed it.  OK, as a completely post-op (therefore a woman with a transsexual history) I too found slight discrepancies.  But Hey!, that's fiction for you.  It gives you the licence to stretch the imagination a little (sometimes a lot) and who knows what medical science will be capable of achieving for my grandchildren or great-grandchildren?

A good story with a nice injection of humour, vital I think, even when all else is serious (which this is obviously not!)

Thank you

Re:  "Only in Oct." I found myself eagerly awaiting for the ending I hoped for. There it was!Jamie and Hillary becoming the proud parents of twins! I was sooooo happy for them, that I started to cry. It was sooooo nice to read a story that ended in a truly happy ending.

You are obviously a very good writer.

However, you are a published author and as such I will raise the bar on criticism to that level.

I loved the story line.  It is very interesting to build a CD story around our national holiday.  I liked the way you showed so much about the characters in so few words.

But the story lacks realism… which can be both a strength and a weakness.  If a story is totally realistic, it has little interest… boring.  But, the story has to somewhat realistic to engage the reader or to get the readers to suspend their disbelief.

In general the story captivated me.  It was like Ivory soap 99.9% pure.  The other.1% was a problem.

The three main areas of disbelief for me are:

It is hard to believe a crossdresser would have this many positive experiences without having several large problems.  You hedged toward problems with the father of his ‘dream date’, but didn’t go there.  The story would have been more interesting and more believable had he incurred some external conflicts.  No one recognized him at the dance?  He had no problems trick or treating with his sisters and his sister’s friends?  What did his father say when he saw the pictures of his son trick or treating?

The $8 million award makes little sense.  Why would a jury award $8 million?  You made it seem like a windfall, so it must have grossly exceeded his actual damages.  Then you have the problem of collecting the award.  What individual, or company for that matter, has $8 million in policy limits.  Without the deep pockets of an insurance company, how do you find a defendant with that type of money?  I had a similar problem writing Baseball Annie.  I explained it as egregious actions on behalf of several defendants with multiple insurance policies.  An author walks a tightrope between explaining too much and not explaining enough.  In this instance I think you came up short.  It might have been better to reduce the award and still have enough money to give the protagonist many options that would move the story forward.

The doctor asked a few questions and immediately started hormone therapy.  This is not within the standards of care, and is very unbelievable.
 
You might want to review this website.

http://www.hbigda.org/      

You could have made this very believable with just a slight modification to your story at this point.  A sentence about waiting three months or by having him go through a RLT for three months prior to the doctor’s visit.  Or, maybe I’m too close to the subject.  That’s the danger of writing for a TG audience when you’re not a TG.

Your story has many mechanical errors.  As I just posted a story this morning with a man’s pant size of 36 x 24 (I meant 36 x 34), I’m not one to throw stones.  However, there are very good editors available through Storysite that would love to work with an author of your immense ability.

Again, this is not a huge criticism, a few weeks ago I read an otherwise great book on writing fiction.  It was riddled with typos.  It happens to the very best of us.  Pick up almost any daily paper and read critically for mechanical errors and you will be shocked.

If you’re looking for a great editor… try Geoff.  I wish I had used him for Color My World.

Congratulations on an otherwise great story.  I hope your sales of The Jessica Project are going well.

Jill