Julian & Julie Ann are one and the same person aren't they?

Julian & Julily Ann are one and the same person aren't they?

Ah, to be young again!

In later years this day will be recalled, perhaps, as one of the high points of growing up.

I was a bit bothered at first by the fairly obvious minor emphasis (I understand those four words, but I doubt that I can explain my use of them.) on Julie Ann's skin, but fortunately it was allowed to fade. Even future mentions were 100% normal and did not revive my discomfort.

I've heard of using socks before, and I've used them that way, too, but never in those circumstances. A nice day in the park. Thank you.

Not to bad.  Minus the few errors that proofing would catch.  And I liked the opening paragraph.

This type of short story doesn't need a lot of character delvelopement.  This is just a vignette in the life of two junior high kids.  Human nature may beg to know why, but in this story the why isn't important.  If the readers will stop and think, we know a lot about the characters in this story that isn't expressed discretely.

    This is a great beginning.  A bit ashakey in the editing department, but thwe plot is seriously considered and well tyhought out.  Maybe a bit of Character developementr and a bit more scenario.  The ice cream gimmick is great, but could have beenused to have the girl do so "unconscious" teasing .  All in all a pweice well done and needs followed up.

Misty

The writing needs some cleaning up and editing but the story line is good. The short epasode depicted doesn't give much room for character developement but you can follow along easily and understand the situation.