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Good job!
Silvia.

As the writer says in her introduction, this is SF with a TG element, rather than a TG SF story, and excellently done.  Like Renegade(above) I too felt there was a hint of inconsistency in the relationships between the 'here' people (David and Shannon) and the 'there' people (Kasha and Saree), but perhaps that what Christine intends.  SF stories are often like that, I guess, who truly understands the ending of '2001'?  Probably not even the author.

The characters are slightly 2 dimensional, though we get some insight into the character of Scott, a relatively minor character, but less insight into why the two main protagonists behve in the way they do.  The writing style is easy, and gratifyingly lacking in grammatical howlers.  Character names stay constant - which is often not the case in some web fiction - and memorable.  

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One thing did puzzle me, however.  Why did David and Shannon need to break into the Lab in order to return to the other world?  It seems they regularly went there merely by dreaming.  Couldn't they do that again?  Perhaps I missed something, or perhaps something needs to be made clearer.

In any case, it's a great story, well told, and I look forward to reading more Christine Myles stories in the future - whatever that is!

Geoff

after part 3:

<<   The words are in the ancient tongue of the long-gone Mirka, a language I do not understand. I do not know what they mean,  >>

So Kasha and Saree have none of David and Shannon's memories?  David and Shannon are in effect dead unless they wake up back in our world?

Like Diane I am a reader (and writer) of science fiction.  The story was very well told, and had a good plot.  Most of the characters were well developed, and I had no trouble keeping up with things.  

Renegade.

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During the story, I thought that David was Kasha, and that Shannon was Saree.  This my be the case, but at the end, I got the feeling that Shannon and David had merged into Kasha, and Saree was a separate person.  Anyway, this did not stop me from enjoying the story.

R.

A truly marvelous story, which really does deserve to see print.  Please submit it somewhere.  At the moment, I happen to be struggling with a collection of short stories by Tim Lebbon, a highly-acclaimed young writer who writes the most depressing end-of-civilization tales without redemption.  Your wonderful story is every bit as complex and well-written, but at the same time, all by itself, provides an antidote to an entire book full of his stories!  Thank you!

This was a well-written, interesting story. Well done!

I am surpassed.  A truly excellent story, told by a master.  I was in great delight as I was enfolded in the tale (and I shall add well pleased by the lack of gramatic errors.)  It is my hope that I, and others, may always be so enthralled by your world and word.  Ilean.

Well, I must preface this review with a small word of warning:  I read voraciously, I read all genres, and I really enjoy science fiction.  That said, on with the review...
The plot-Great!  A novel new idea in a genre with too few new ideas!  Loved it!
The length-Too short for a novel, but it would be a good length for a new "Other Worlds" style anthology
The Characters-Okay, now with a negative note.  The main characters were very good, but I, myself, would have liked a little more background, a brief history of them, if you will, to flesh them out and make them more "human."
Overall?  I would say publish it and reap the rewards that come with being an up and coming master of your craft.
Diane