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Hzlxnm A big thank you for your article.Really looking forward to read more. Fantastic.

Ej193G Not bad post, leave it at my bookmarks!....

DISGUSTING!

after 11

Ugh, it seems that they are in a spiral. Each one wants to have the last word, and this is a GREAT way to destroy a relationship. Why didn't the girls expect some form of retribution? I don't mind CONSENSUAL humiliation but when it gets out of hand things can get serious, especially if a third party decides they want in on the game.

well what can one say  a great start to what is looking like a great story well written a wifes revenge interesting way of going about it will comment further after reading rest of story

After re-reading chapter 12, I would like to see a chapter 13, the further adventures of David.

Way too fantastic...I happen to know a little about electronics also, and i know that the device in question would not do serious harm if removed  with swift motion...yes there may be some small electricl shock, but not enough to hurt...I happen to know this for a fact...That is why this story is so fantastically unreal...if a pair of electrical panties could produce that much electricity to buckle a man to his knees, then it is way too much eclectricity, which if continually use as in this story, would efeectively emasculate even the strongest man...and furthermore, where in the panties, was the receiver? the only logical place would be the crotch. But then that would be so unconfortable, you wouldn't be able to sit down right.

Barbara Lynn Terry

After part 12

I'm glad to see you and this series back.  I like the fact that Hazel, though young,  seems to be treating this maturely as teaching David a lesson in good behavior beyond just the dressing business, and that Betty doesn't seem mean and seems to be taking things in a light hearted way.  Both girls seem like they actually like David and would like to be nice sister and friend again if they can get "her" to see how rotten "he's" been and reform.  The two girls seem to like him as a girl, and, I think, are actually giving "her" an experience that might just have the exact opposite effect of that desired by his mom and Thelma.  I hope so; I hope he gets to like being a sister and girlfriend and the girls come to treat him like that rather than someone just to be tormented - after some embarrassing "learning experiences" of course :-)  I'm looking forward to part 13.

QUESTIONS:

<<  A couple of years had gone by and the Discipline Panties that Diane had used on Richard had not been used.  >>

WHAT HAPPENED???  Did Richard overhear the girls in talking in the kitchen (at the end of 11) and confront them or what?  If I'd have been Richard and overhbeard them, I would have walked in the kitchen, released the girls, and said, "I heard you.  You haven't learned a darn thing.  I did nothing more to you than you did to me and I was hoping you would say to me, 'Let's call it even and quit.'.  I'm outta here; have a nice life."

<<  Diane came down in a few minutes and she was dressed as a teen age school girl pig tails and all. It was the costume Richard had made her wear when she was being disciplined a couple of years ago.  >>

Wasn't this the costume Diane and Thelma made Richard wear?  He had the girls dressed as pre-teens when it was his turn.  

I personally like the tit for tat and the one up-manship of the humiliation how far can it go the sky's the limit. It’s a fun story keep up the good work!!

Cindy_69

after 11
I agree with Sharlee.  The girls haven't learned a thing.  I hope Richard heard their sceaming and will take steps to prevent this.

OOP's, here we go again (after Part 11).  It seem's that the girls didn't learn a lesson and now want revenge for the revenge.  Sorry, but I think that the girls should fail and all come to an agreement that the revenge business has gotten out of hand and should stop.  If not, Richard should dump Diane and move on, if the girls cannot stop their immature behavior.  Better seperation, than hatred!!!!!!!!!!!!

I agree with Jezzi -- isn't that strange?
 He's done enough to them, and now it's time to let them off the hook. An agreement to "Hey, how about if we three continue this in a more 'play' manner, shall we," in the morning would be a nice change. It wouldn't be revenge, get-even time, just some people enjoying a little unusual activity that they all enjoy.

After part 10,
     I hope that Richard is just teasing the girls and in the morning lets them go back to normal.  I thought he had learned a lesson, but if he continues with this he will be no better than the girls were.  

A really nice segue into some justice.  Very nicely done.  I am looking forward to the rest--Sharlee

Thanks for part 9.  I think Richard is handling things well.  He is getting back at the girls, but not to such a nasty extent that they will be enemies forever - something he, himself has every right to be.  Every time the girls complain, he calmly matches what he did with what they did to him.  He, apparantly learned from his experience to be a nicer person and is trying to teach the girls rather than just punish them.  

I liked it it was fun

Trapped in heels story?  Absolutely not.  I agree entirely with Jezzi's suggestions!!  Totally excellent idea.  Suggest that you conclude this piece with some justice!  I was looking forward to a conclusion with some type of mutual resolution and perhaps a better marrage.  Alas, this is not to be and the bitches needs some attitude readjustment of their own, prior to the divorce.  Sharlee

After part 8

<<  To be continued maybe. Do we want a trapped in Heels story?  >>

Hell, no!  This was SO unfair.  Diane is just proving to be a sadistic bitch!   She obviously doesn't love him to do the shoe thing to him after he learned his lesson and did everything she asked.  I would like to see a sequel, "Trapped in a Bra"  where Diane and Thelma are in the bras and Richard has the controller.  He gives them a coup[le of shocks, and then, a.) throws the controller away and lets them go, showing he is a much better person than either of them is,  and b.) files divorce papers.

After part 6:
   Still enjoying the story, BUT ... Richard may have started out as the asshole, but your doing a good job of making him the sympathetic character and the girls seem petty bitches.  If Diane loves him and the purpose of the week is redemption, I think the blackmail pics are ultimately counterproductive.  With the pics for blackmail, how will Diane know whether he's really reformed out of love for her or just going through the motions out of fear?

after part 4:
Well he has no reason to be angry at Diane, he didn't even try to defend his actions.  why?  And why isn't he mad as hell, even though he's afraid to show it outwardly?  He just seems to be emotionlessly passively submissive.

Great idea these panties.

What would be good if a little more time was spent on the build up of the stimulation to cause the ejaculation or the wetting. How does it feel at first? warm? tingly? throbbing?

Can you try to stop it. How does the penis feel?

Just a bit more detail would certainly heighten the "erotic" pleasure for me.

still after part 3
Suggestion:  If there is punishment, how about a bra trap.

after part 3
     I don't think Ricard deserves to be punished.  He was doing what he was told.  I hope Diane gives him a chance to explain and believes him.  If she does punish him unfairly, I think he should take a chance, cut the damn things off , and leave Diane.

Good start from a first time contributor with an interesting concept of electric Punishment Panties for chastity control and potential humiliation.  One problem with the concept is what generates that strong of a shock?  Where is the power source?

While I can suspend disbelief about how the panties work, I was troubled by the inadequate spell-checking and proof-reading, e.g. “marked” instead of “market.”  There are writing tips and volunteer editors linked at Crystal’s Author’s Corner which I recommend you using.  The best tip is to put the story aside for a few days and then slowly re-read it before submitting.  You’ll be amazed at the errors you’ll find yourself.  Personally I would also like to read a little more details of the lovemaking and the main character’s feelings.

Notwithstanding my criticisms, this story has a lot of potential and I encourage you to continue it, just write a little more carefully and it will be more enjoyable for all.  I look forward to reading a better part 2.

SS