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The Perfect Girl
by Tytus

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Comment by anna on 01/03/09
As a pretty tv I love to dress in beautiful feminine silken clothes and lingerie for my boyfriend.  It excites him so much, and he takes me over and over. I love lying on my back under him, looking up at his manly face and wrapping my nylon-clad legs around him as he pushes into me and fills me with his semen. I hope we will get married and that someday he will make me pregnant. Thank you for such a beautiful story.

Comment by jo on 01/03/03
good story, but needs some grammer and spelling work. I like the natural way it unfolds. Maybe you should move through the wedding and onto life as a couple. Please write more

Comment by Starhawk on 12/31/02
Grammatical points aside, due to the author not being an english speaker, this was a good story.  Personally, I like stories written from the male perspective when he encounters a "special girl".  I write from this view myself.

You might try having an english speaker proof your story next time to make it more readible.   There are several good editors you can find here or on Fictionmania.


Comment by Cai on 12/31/02
A very nicely, well told story.  I would like to see more of  your work.



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