I won't make you sit through a re-hash of what the others have said. Instead I did have one little question, how is 'making someone enjoy it' a form of caring? It seems to me that is just another cage, as they don't really have the choice to like it or not. Only: "You like it. Period." Since it's not their choice...you get the picture.

At any rate I found your order of events confusing at times, and you need to work on your formatting. K?

Hello, Jane!

Into 27k I think you have poured the outline for at least a 150k erotic treatment. You seem to be in a hurry to get someplace, so that words get omitted or put into the wrong place or misspelled, etc. (I took a moment to check the dictionary on the spelling of that "m" word -- one of my recurring bugaboos.)

You give your reader the merest sketch of your experiences in America, and I would certainly like to encounter YOUR imagination at work describing the intimate side of the two years across the Great Water.
Yob, (your spelling, my exclamation) that would be something worth waiting for!

I don't know that in tg lit I've ever encountered the explicit feminizing of a father by a son. Hmmm, rich possibility for interpretations, but again you've just pointed at it, accomplished it in a sentence or two (or paragraph, whatever!) then gone on leaving the readers' anticipations quite unrealized.

Love the descrtions of the clothes. This story was a little harder to read then some of your others toward the end I do admit that but still very enjoyable.

Jane, your stories are fun and enjoyable but very hard to read due to terrible grammar.  You really should work with an editor/proofreader.  In this one, I liked the tie in to Serena Lawhead's work, but I think you should have acknowledged that.