I really liked your writing style, clear concise prose and good character dialog.  Stories of this ilk bring back strong memories of myself at Larry's age when my mother discovered my stash of Sandy Thomas books and my girly clothes I had salvaged from the rag bag.  She actually threatened, that if I didn't stop wearing girls clothes she would send me to live with my mean great aunt Dorothy who would make me wear girls clothes all the time.  The combination of fear and humiliation brought tears to my eyes which she misconstrued as contrition, and she did not follow through with her wonderous promise.  There were many spots in this series that brought those same tears to my eyes.

I hope someday we could see a 4th chapter following the heroines progress.  Let Mona become as much of a woman as Laura so they can truly mother and daugter and eventually have men in their lives!

reread this story again and it brought tears of joy to me as i am a ts as well

Loved the story.  Wonderfully well written.  It is a shame Laura's guardians had to be nazi and make her quit smoking though.

I LOVE ALL OF YOUR STORIES. THEY   ARE ALL VERY ENJOYABLE WITH A NICE TOUCH OF HUMOR AND NO TRASH SEX TALK..      

Hi Hebe,
       A delicious twist on the old punishment plot, I really enjoyed reading the most recent parts. I almost fell off my chair I was laughing so hard with the ending.
Thank You and Hugs,
Chrisl

THANK YOU THIS IS A GREAT STORY  AND A GOOD READ ALL ON ITS OWN. HOWEVER MUCH LIKE "ROUND TRIP" IT BEGS FOR MORE. YOU ARE A GOOD WRITER AND PROVE THAT TOP TRANSGENDER FICTION DOES NOT HAVE TO GO FOR THE "X" RATINGS TO SUCCEED.
THANKS AGAIN FOR SOMETHING THAT WILL BE REREAD MORE THAN ONCE.

ANOTHER BRIAN

Like the others, I feel the story is incomplete! Will yhere be a sequel -- I'm waiting to see how Larry makes out in Fl.
  I must admit I am appalled at the drinking and smoking parts, having taken my first beer at about Larry's age. Smoking, no way!!
  Will Mona re-enter Larry's life later? Will Larry get to Florida? Tune in next week for "Perils of Laura."

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. I just feel that is ended on a short unfinished note.  We have no idea whether Laura ever makes it to grandmother's house, no idea of Mona's fate, and we are left feeling like someone took the food off the table before we finished eating. Please, could you finish the story?

GREAT STORY!  Just when you think there are no new TG fiction plots, bang-o!  Thanks, Hebe.  However, this story is listed as complete, yet ends before we get to the bad boy to good girl parts.  And what happens to Mona?  I assume the "complete rating was an error?

High, very high marks for originality: a situation unparallelled in
any T* story I can ever remember seeing. And great characters as
well, & what promises to be an interesting plot line. Heartiest
congratulations on a truly remarkable tale; I'm looking forward to
the continuation(s). Good boy to bad girl to bad boy to good girl?
Fascinating.


--Pervy

Another excellent "different" story from Hebe. A good plot and engaging characters. Even the dodgy father was drawn in a surprisingly sympathetic manner.

I wonder if we'll see more about Laura. Will she go on to be a professional grifter like her Dad, or find some way to go straight?