I’m the author, you can read 4 completed series of the misadventures of Celyn at Big Closet

I really like this story. I wonder what the “missing part” has to offer. I hope all of the loose ends are tied up.

this is a nice story but there is a huge section missing, chapter 4.  i am sure the secret to why a boy transitions to a girl is in that chapter.  are we going to get to read it?  hopefully we will.

  Great writing wonderful story ..Just need more chapters to see how this plays out .... thank you for sharing with us wierdos ..

xoxooxoxx Rone

I love the story so far.  Feeling quite a bit of tension as to the reason Celyn had to have the operation and change, but I'm sure you have your reasons for prolonging the mystery.  And bringing Celyn along slowly is obviously the best approach since the change was not his idea, but a necessity.  Looking forward to seeing how the story unfolds...

good start - keep going!

part four missing and not finished

where is part four

it is intersting and will be good to see how it develops

Glad to see you posting your story here. It will be interesting to see the story develop.

Cool! :) A new author, posting a first, tentative story fragment. Here's my first opportunity to post a comment that is *timely*. With any luck, it might even prove to be *useful*. :)

First off, I like the story premise, which is most certainly not Your Same Old Thing[TM] -- most of the sub-genres in TG fiction have been done to death. In this introduction and first installment, a post-operative transsexual must deal with the ramifications of her transition -- both the physical aspects following the operation, and the social aspects with respect to those who knew her before.

The author makes it clear in several places that the main character is less than thrilled with her transition, and with having *had* to transition, though we do not yet know any of the history that brought her to this point -- all of that awaits development in the rest of the story. One thing that we do discover by the end of this first part, though, is that the main character has been hiding her transition from people who knew her before. This has the makings of a "caught with consequences" sort of story, but with a twist, since the main character is caught in much more than just a dress. I will be curious and interested to see in what direction this story goes.

I appreciate your parenthetical remarks for your mates across The Pond, who may be unfamiliar with the UK educational system, or that what we call "soccer" is known as "football" almost everywhere else. However, your narrative, which is reasonably well written, could do with a bit of smoothing out. If I may offer some examples:

>>Sion looked at me and made a slight movement towards me, I felt myself wanting to move towards him as if we were about to hug.

Perhaps you might try: "...slight movement towards me; I felt myself..." or even "...slight movement towards me. I felt myself..."

>>I picked up the post, that had arrived after everyone had left the house that morning, and, after checking that there was nothing for me, put it on the small side table.

May I suggest fewer commas, here: "I picked up the post that had arrived after everyone had left the house that morning and, after checking that there was nothing for me, put it on the small side table." -- it flows better, and "that" is best not preceded by a comma ("I picked up the post, WHICH had arrived..." works, though).

>>There were two, one from my sister to say that she couldn't come down from university this evening for the meal my parents had arranged for my end of exam celebration, I was a little disappointed, but not surprised given her hectic social life.

Perhaps "There were two: one from my sister..." and "...end of exam celebration -- I was a little disappointed, but not surprised, given her hectic social life." might provide a touch more impact.

>>I peeled my cycling top and shorts off and put them in the dirty clothes basket. Next my T-shirt and underpants.

The following fragment would read more smoothly as part of the preceding sentence: "I peeled my cycling top and shorts off and put them in the dirty clothes basket, followed by my T-shirt and underpants." or even "...and put them in the dirty clothes basket; they were followed by..."

>>I took the tub of lube and rubbed some around the edge of my vagina as I slowly, painfully, eased the prosthetic penis out and pulled down the straps that held it in place. Something I wouldn't miss having to do in the future.

Another fragment that interrupts the smooth flow of your narrative. Perhaps you might try: "...the straps that held it in place -- which is something I wouldn't miss..."

>>I lay down on the towel took out my next to largest stent and dilated myself with that one and and then the largest one for the next half hour.

May I suggest: "I lay down on the towel and, taking out my two largest stents, dilated myself with the smaller one first, immediately followed by the larger, for the next half hour."