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The Quarterback and the Cheerleader
by Paul G Jutras

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Comment by Dianna on 03/25/08
Hmmm...I can't see the new girl submitting to any sex willingly. So unless the Jock wants to rape her....

and then submitting her to her father's torments? I see suicide in someone's future....

Comment by Annabel on 08/05/04
Dear Paul
I really appreciate the ideas you have and the quantity of your output but I have reservations about the quality of the final product.  In quite a few of your stories, there are good ideas. However as a reader, I find it frustrating that the basic story line is not developed more.
I wish you would write one longer story instead of five shorter ones.
Please keep writing.  Your work and creativity is appreciated and I know how much work goes into writing stories.
Hugs, Annabel
Comment by Jane Hudson on 08/05/04
I liked it
Comment by Sharon on 08/05/04
I see you still haven't found an editor. The story is rushed and there is nowhere showing any sort of continuity. Get real and get help. I read your stories once in a while hoping they would get better, but they don't. Better luck next time as the former stories totally sucks, and this one is no better>
Comment by Early June on 08/04/04
A diferent type story from Paula. It is nice, short, and sweet.
Paula used several different themes in this short essay (incest, rape, sci-fi brainswap, justce against a jerk, mtf and ftm)  yet they all fit in the space provided.  It is good to see paula spreading out. This was a creative story. My only wish, is that it were longer.
Comment by MAX on 08/04/04
fun story


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